• bi-trillets attempt. this one wasn’t easy for me…never do well when rhymin is involved.

    endless night confession

    breathe in the black smoke, love feels like a joke
    the nights we wasted tasted strange
    cheap liquor kiss, dirty exchange

    you were my worst itch, struck like a kill switch
    old barroom lungs in borrowed light
    we swore we’…Read More

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    • A brilliant submittal, Syr Dru 🥂

      Congratulations on another successfully excellent effort in displaying such admirable skill in the true essence and grasp of that which is conveyed in these earnestly shared teaching sessions.

      Your poetic potential is second to none … this piece is spot-on in every sense of the phrase: meter, poetic voice, i…Read More

      • I wonder if we are readin the same poem. I really expected this one to get marked up with a red pen on all the places I went wrong. I appreciate your input and the lessons you’re providin. I’ll agree with you on fixin the rhyme so I’ll add the s to pain. but you’re gonna have to pry my lowercase letters and lack of punctuation from my cold dead ha…Read More

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    The Alter of Amunet

    In the sweltering heat of ancient Thebes, a young priestess named Neith knelt before the altar of Amunet, her heart heavy with the weight of a secret she dared not speak aloud. As incense curled around her, Neith's mind...

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    Bored By The Norm

    Each confession a breadcrumb  Haven’t got all the answers yet Same pattern a different drum Raw silence equals heavy debt   Numbers change for a price Depending on if you play along Trusting no one is sound advice Said some old forgotten song   Explain the fundamental illusion  That leads...

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    • Oh, this is good, Damian.

    • There’s a song in there somewhere.Obviously in a minor key.

      Great write🤘

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Peter. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Usually in a minor key for sure. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • I would be bored with the norm as well. This is good Damian

    • Powerful writing, my friend.

    • First this can be both a poem and a song, it has the beat of a song. Second, You said in your note that instead of thinking wiser You rolled with it, but truth to be said your poem from first line to the final is all wisdom. For me this is a monologue with the inner self to make sense of what is not sense, To be aware of everything that happened and what is needed to be changed, the “had enough” and welling to breaking the patten of the same repeation is felt in the final verse, your poems always has a personal feeling and that make them special.

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Light. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I think it works either way myself. I must say I always enjoy your commentary and opinions, you’re pretty much on point with where I was going with this one. There are always pieces of me in my writes my friend. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • Oh damn, that last verse hit hard. After each of the other verses, it became a hammer of defiance. I’m not sure I believe in a norm. It always just strikes me as others expecting you to be more like them. Meet them at their level because they’re too lazy to move. To evolve. No thank you. This is another strong piece. And I think just rolling with it worked out beautifully, my friend

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I don’t know that I believe in the norm either, I agree it’s like living up to the standard of others, funny thing is that they can’t live up to it themselves. But hypocrites love to snipe at others. So glad I rolled with it as well. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • Powerful work, my friend. Vivid and sharp.

    • Damian when the illusions melt away and the masks are gone there is a great since of liberation as well as sadness. Not fitting in can make one feel alone but at the same time emancipated from a lifetime of being a square peg in a round hole. Truly great poetry here, my friend. You have given me the reader a glimpse into a life that is honest to oneself. I am most enriched to have read this.

      John

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, John. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’ve learned over time that the honest approach can be the most open to be heard. Thank you so much for your support. Appreciate you.

        Damian

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    my son

    sadness wells then it quellsan intense feeling astounds meso big a feeling I can barely contain itit tugs at my heart late at nighta reel to reel of faces in my private theatertears escape my eyesa confession I grow...

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    • Powerfully penned, Brenda. Loss is tough my friend, a very heartfelt write. Grief is sometimes like pacing in circles wondering if one did enough, and praying that our beloved know how much they were loved. Prayers and positive energy sent your way, thanks for sharing something so private. Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • hello dearest Damian thank you my friend I don’t why but I struggled with the reply all of you being so tender hearted thank you dear soul ❤️

    • Brenda this piece was just lovely.
      Your sadness is palpable in the words and the spaces between them.
      Sometimes I wonder what the point of life is…..I haven’t come up with an answer yet.
      🙏🙏🙏🙏💋

      • hello dearest Benny he was so full of life in such a hurry even as a child to greet the world I actually tried to keep him home with me but he had a spirit of adventure thank you my friend ❤️

    • This is incredibly sad! Your honest, very well expressed self-reflections strike right at the heart of your readers. I can feel the ink bleeding from your heart! A big heart felt hug of love and positives energy! 🫂🙏

    • Thank You for being his Mom🤍 He chose You to be His Mom🤍. I can’t imagine the pain of losing a child… it’s for sure unbearable, it is, the only comfort is to remember that his soul is near, He is near, if You can’t see him it doesn’t mean that it is not true. You are strong to express your pain sincerely like this, but please please please… Don’t dwell in gulit, it’s not your fault or his, as I’ve said in my first sentences. HE chose You to be his Mom and Thank You for being his 🤍 always remember this, always and ever!

      Sending You warm hugs strong beautiful Mother💓

      • hello lovely light your comment made me cry I wonder if he chose because he thought he could help he was so enigmatic such a force I love your thoughts and I miss him very much thank you kind soul ❤️

        • The reason why He chose You and You chose him maybe a mystery till now, but it doesn’t matter, let it be and come clear if it will ever be. I’m really sorry for your loss, may His soul be near You surrounding You with comfort, warmth and solace 🙏🏻

    • I can’t add to that which has already been written. Death is just borrowing him for a moment. Your heart will probably never mend, but will pulse strong in your memories.

      • hello dearest Rob yes it was all too short from the time he was born untill he died I hope he knows how much I miss him thank you dear friend ❤️

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    soulful

    my sadness haunts, touch me once and you'll feel it toothe misty darkness in my eyesthe depths of my soul, clowded over with shadowskeening heart, a wept rebellionin deep need of understandingalone in my painnone to know, I drive...

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    • Powerfully penned, Brenda. A very heartfelt write my friend. Appreciate you.

      Damian

    • Chère C.,
      Yes, heartfelt (says Damian), and I won’t disagree.
      I sincerely hope that you’ll encounter things that makes your heart stay.
      You deserve it!
      Love your writes.
      Warm regards, Gus

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