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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Here is Guillotine bi-trillets
The ring of steel bells. beckons us to hell
The audience ignores the sound
Multiple bodies hit the groundThe chiming goes on, sings a restless song
Unrelenting sorrowful tears
The heart shutters to stop in fearHope is so far gone, whispered please at dawn
Guillotine swinging in the sun
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Thank you
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You’re ever-so welcome, Fia
My apology: I forgot an edit; V2-L3, (shuttering should be shuddering).
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It’s okay. That took me three tries. Lol
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YEAH, ya killed it!
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Read MoreDrawing space, the beast lurks neargrit to wit in creep of dreampoor as dust on golden tearcarving eyes that shout & beamgroaning lines of spine & placedaze in sweet for kiss or bitemusky cloak of dusk & lacestars to...
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hello dearest poet I really enjoyed the style and subject matter here ❤️
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Powerfully penned, Benjamin. This write hits like a Mack truck my friend. Amazing work. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Writes like this are quite difficult for the most of us. So few even try. Yet you did and you did it very well. The rhymes are solid and well thought out. Most of the cadence is kept moving fluidly. Along with an interesting storyline to boot.
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incredibly penned…compelling. your imagery captivating,
you weave words with amazing fluidity. i too very much enjoyed your topic & style.
~ chantepleure
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Read MoreMuse in red to my labor blueblood on stone true yonder findswending beam 'round the healing bendcautious flames light cooling minds connected wordssnake & flower serrated tongue for honeyed slayingclever beauty cleft & splayedsalamandrine crawling understuck on point to mending ember refining...
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Powerfully penned, Benjamin. Excellent write my friend there are lots of layers in your work. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Tight even down to the rhyme, to cool
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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
bi-trillets attempt. this one wasn’t easy for me…never do well when rhymin is involved.
endless night confession
breathe in the black smoke, love feels like a joke
the nights we wasted tasted strange
cheap liquor kiss, dirty exchangeyou were my worst itch, struck like a kill switch
old barroom lungs in borrowed light
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A brilliant submittal, Syr Dru
Congratulations on another successfully excellent effort in displaying such admirable skill in the true essence and grasp of that which is conveyed in these earnestly shared teaching sessions.
Your poetic potential is second to none … this piece is spot-on in every sense of the phrase: meter, poetic voice, i…Read More
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I wonder if we are readin the same poem. I really expected this one to get marked up with a red pen on all the places I went wrong. I appreciate your input and the lessons you’re providin. I’ll agree with you on fixin the rhyme so I’ll add the s to pain. but you’re gonna have to pry my lowercase letters and lack of punctuation from my cold dead ha…Read More
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Ha-hahhhh!
That’s a given, M’Friend, but I’ll never give-up on ya. 🤓
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Gobsmacking good, Fia!
When you can take a form like this one you’ve never even seen before, observe a few easy details – then, with an earnest effort, turn it into such a creatively captivating poetic tale, makingi it seem effortless – now, that’s something to be proud of, because not everyone possesses this level of potential and/or natural…Read More