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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
for sake of the lesson I added punctuation…don’t get attached.
gravity slip
I stumble thru a world
that’s bent slightly outa focus
as if it were half dream,
half burn.
heat risin off my skin in waves
like quiet embers tryin
to decide if I’m worth ignitin.every breath feels wrong,
every step lands heavy,
gravity clawin up my s…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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I’m sorry to hear that Paula. I hope you get well soon. Best of luck.
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i hope it heals soon ❤️
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get well soon Paula….we miss your postings 💋
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I hope you feel better.
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Beautifully penned, Kelly. Excellent write my friend, loved the depth of this one. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian. How wonderful to find you here, leaving me with a smile!
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More. Post more.
Even the light from a burning match is epic within pitch black. This is what this write of yours is.
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I will do my best not to disappoint. Till next time…thank you, Mark!
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Okay, this is one of those writes that makes you sit and just let it seep in. This is so good.
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I am so thrilled you enjoyed this one, Fia. It has long been one of my favorites. A poem that perhaps, you can get lost in.
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Fantastic.
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Good to see you again, Adagio. Thank you for the vote of confidence!
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
This is my Free verse
Do you hear the sun?
As the rays beat down on the ground,
It is subtle but poignant
It’s purpose is to burn.
The exquisite heat,
does not match the coolness in your eyesDo you smell the wind?
Multicolored in its complexity
Surrounds you,
Invades your very core.
It gives you life.
Then withdraws to take your b…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poem’s captive spell.
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I’ll work on it. Thanks for the guidance
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You make sharing a distinct pleasure. 🙏
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Read MoreLove Sonnet LXVIII If I wrote you a poem, would you hear me? Would you read me, swallow my metaphors, kiss my similes into oblivion? I only have words to offer, words filled with allegories, stories of how the moon holds my haiku, hoping to be next...
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hello dearest poet this is so beautifully written brimming with feeling and the gift of writer ❤️
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Crimsin, thank you for your kind words on this poem. I am happy you found the ‘beauty’ and ‘feelings’.
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“…splashing alliteration on the pages of your heart.” My, my, how poetically defined! I love your sonnets. What a gift you have of writing them!
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Hi Kelly, you know I always love when I see you commenting on one of my poems. Thank you for ‘splashing’ some words on my poem.
As you can see, this is sonnet number 68, only 32 more to go. Then I will publish them as a tribute to Pablo Neruda.
I hope you are doing well. I must get over to WC soon and see if you posted some more poems there.
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Your love Sonnets are like flowers… each has its own sweet scent, beauty and allure. This is gorgeous.
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Sheer brilliance, Syr 253
You’ve mastered the heatbeat techniques of Free Verse poetry: Imagery, deeply gripping emotion, metaphor, spot-on line-breaks, seamless enjambment, syntax; and, except for the distraction of missing “g’s”, your diction and spellbinding flow would be irresistibly captivating to the senses.
Also, your well-placed…Read More