• Here is the Eye’s Open sonnet. Thank you, Richard, for helping me understand the nuances of a sonnet

    Was born with eyes wide-open on that day,
    to be prepared for seeing every truth …
    not wanting to offend in any way,
    for what had happened up there on the roof.

    While holding onto pasts, like in a box …
    we crawled, we stood, we soon beg…Read More

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    Eye's Opened (A Sonnet)

    Was born with eyes wide-open on that day,to be prepared for seeing every truth …not wanting to offend in any way,for what had happened up there on the roof. While holding onto pasts, like in a box …we crawled, we...

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    • Nice to see the structured discipline.
      Cathartic work.

    • Now this is what I call perfect poetry

    • Thank you so much for the compliment. I enjoyed the processes and your guidance.

    • Goodness-ME, Fia!🍷

      I’m amazed at how well you’ve done with your first effort at writing a Sonnet … it just goes to show the wonders waiting to be unlocked and freed under the surface of one’s bountiful potential.

      This is no small accomplishment, and one you should be exceedingly proud of, as only a rare few of all poetesses and poets can compose a correct Sonnet. The Sonnet form is known as the Rolls Royce of poetry, and due to its “iambic pentameter” requirement many give-up before ever mastering its beautifully rhythmical unstressedSTRESSED meter.

      How exemplary your natural creativity fits so smoothly into the diction and syntax of each line, and how perfectly your lines enjamb and break. Emotion, metaphor, imagery, grammar, spot-on rhymes (except, V2, L3&4, but it’s near-rhyme and can be addressed anytime) … also, your all around theme and ambiance are held faithfully throughout.

      Poignantly sad, you convey a tale so many can relate to in so many ways … you’re an amazingly original poetess, Fia, with a broad potential to master the art of poetry few possess.

      Thank you for sharing your lovely potic skills, to inspire us all at the “Back to Poetry Basics” group.
      You make an olde bard ‘n teacher so proud and ohhhh-sooo very happy! ⁓ Richard🖌

    • Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent sonnet my friend, you can do anything you put your mind to cuz. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

      Damian

  • This is my “Magic of Poetic Voice” submission

    The Beast Confession
    Confessions are made to come from the heart
    To make you feel the weight of it
    Whether is it good or bad from the start
    I need you to sit and understand me a bit

    I wandered into a space without time
    Alone with my thoughts
    Never hoping that someone could be…Read More

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      To make you feel the weight of it
      Whether is it good or bad from the start
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    Unique Styles

    driven insaneblue and greysleek bodycobra grillheadlightscutting nightsengine roarsdual pipes wheels rollchrome artdescribingintricate fleshfingeringher six speedclutchingthat lust horsepowerequalsfrictionloving torquesport bodyinvitingthe curvestop down road readysoft highwaydrag stripstarting linemy mustangyour corvettewe embraceunique styles   Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2019

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    • The fast pace reminds me of an engine revving up and going down a racetrack

    • The beat, rhythm and pace is like a racing car! The reader wouldn’t know are You talking about a woman or a car lol. The closing lines are brilliant, and “unique styles” it is. Wonderful poem, to read it in the morning it fuels us with good energy to start the engine ✨

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Light. So glad you connected with the write my friend. That was the vibe I was going for I love when a write has more than one perspective or dual meanings. Thanks for that wonderful commentary. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • Corvette! Corvette! I’m a ‘Vette girl. But that’s mostly because daddy was a Chevy guy and Ford was a dirty word around him. Once wrote a poem about a Mustang once though. Much enjoyed this one, my friend

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I like cars in general, but I’m kinda a Ford guy though. Though I like Chevy’s too. Dodge is my least favorite. It was a dirty word around my dad when I was growing up. lol. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • Cool dude. Great description. The energy & performance is highly moving. Excellent.

    • This had the rumbling force of a corvette being geared up for a rip roaring ride down the highway. And to me it also read like a sensual poem about the power of the engine getting ready to fly like bat out of hell down the highway of love. Fantastic work my friend.

      John

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, John. So glad you connected with the write my friend. One of my favorite things about writing, is having the ability for double meanings in a piece. Nice catch. Appreciate you.

        Damian

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    Zapped

      He looks so peaceful lying there. If it wasn’t for that tube coming out of his mouth, and those wires strapped to his chest, I would think he was blissfully dreaming in that hospital bed.  Oh God!! Why did he...

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