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    Eye's Opened (A Sonnet)

    Was born with eyes wide-open on that day,to be prepared for seeing every truth …not wanting to offend in any way,for what had happened up there on the roof. While holding onto pasts, like in a box …we crawled, we...

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    • Nice to see the structured discipline.
      Cathartic work.

    • Now this is what I call perfect poetry

    • Thank you so much for the compliment. I enjoyed the processes and your guidance.

    • Goodness-ME, Fia!🍷

      I’m amazed at how well you’ve done with your first effort at writing a Sonnet … it just goes to show the wonders waiting to be unlocked and freed under the surface of one’s bountiful potential.

      This is no small accomplishment, and one you should be exceedingly proud of, as only a rare few of all poetesses and poets can compose a correct Sonnet. The Sonnet form is known as the Rolls Royce of poetry, and due to its “iambic pentameter” requirement many give-up before ever mastering its beautifully rhythmical unstressedSTRESSED meter.

      How exemplary your natural creativity fits so smoothly into the diction and syntax of each line, and how perfectly your lines enjamb and break. Emotion, metaphor, imagery, grammar, spot-on rhymes (except, V2, L3&4, but it’s near-rhyme and can be addressed anytime) … also, your all around theme and ambiance are held faithfully throughout.

      Poignantly sad, you convey a tale so many can relate to in so many ways … you’re an amazingly original poetess, Fia, with a broad potential to master the art of poetry few possess.

      Thank you for sharing your lovely potic skills, to inspire us all at the “Back to Poetry Basics” group.
      You make an olde bard ‘n teacher so proud and ohhhh-sooo very happy! ⁓ Richard🖌

    • Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent sonnet my friend, you can do anything you put your mind to cuz. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

      Damian

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    Final Retreat

    When Summer's heatgives way toautumn's bliss,I will kiss thisworld goodbyeand walk tothe woodsto savethe last sliverof my humanity,where the creekmeets the river ofmy destiny.Far away fromthe shitty city ofsick Streetsand brokendreams.

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    outstaring a blank wall

    outstaring a blank wall You stand before a wall.It waits, blank as withheld breath.What hovers over you?Drafts unpinned,stories unspoken,videos sealed,pages chasing horizonsthat never arrive.Perfection whispers—a mask for delay.What if you placedone imperfect mark?What if you let motioncarve its shape?The...

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  • This is my “Magic of Poetic Voice” submission

    The Beast Confession
    Confessions are made to come from the heart
    To make you feel the weight of it
    Whether is it good or bad from the start
    I need you to sit and understand me a bit

    I wandered into a space without time
    Alone with my thoughts
    Never hoping that someone could be…Read More

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      To make you feel the weight of it
      Whether is it good or bad from the start
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    I'll Wait

    Not good with surprisesYet here you areYou approached timidly at firstThen the nervousness showedWhat was more  endearingyour approach or the executionI was not looking in your directionYou made my head turnYou made my mind stay on younew questions and...

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