I have no idea why my response was doubled, Richard. Sorry for the wasted space.

This begins with "day thins on toothy edges," in the first line, and the next to last line has " toothed whispers," creating something for the piece to hold on to while a slow current carries the reader along. No people are mentioned or inferred except where you start...

Very nice. This piece has a nice flow that pulls the reader in for the long slow ride and has a wonderful feel to it. Very well done, my friend.

Thank you Willow, very much.

This is me in a test to ss if I can post anything now.