Well this is musing. lol
liked the people like privacy they get intrusion part really good

thoroughly enjoyed Damian .. & then some .. Neville

Hellish visions. Intense feeling.
Regards
James

A bit towards the apocalypse in its foretelling, yeah? I also get a “War Pigs” vibe as well (Black Sabbath).
Excellent rhyme scheme as well. Great write Damian.

Wow, one more of your excellent, intense and thought provoking right things, dear Damien! Especially the last verse speaks to me a lot. World most people consider God as all seeing eye that is watching and judging us, all sing that UI energy is just experiencing itself, manifested and the form of a human being. So it is entirely up to us what to do with our lives. Personally, I think it is best to listen to our heart and to our intuition. Why won’t lead us a stray.

keep trying ..

This is kinda where my mind has been lately. I recently took a lower paying, more physically demanding job just to access these very feelings. I just wanted feel what real living is like again. You’ll only get what you give, and many of us have to give a lot more just to get a little, but these are the conditions that shape the poet. Keep trying, and keep in mind that more people see you than you realize! Life is hard fkn work! But I know you know this, because you are a poet!!

Thankfully you, we all, have access to let it all out in writing. That is our strongest voice. God knows that creative writing really helped me become who I am. I still have a vocal glitch, that hits me whenever it wants, but it isn’t a handicap. I have learned to be confident regardless. Writing gives us a super power. You will win the battles Fia.
Awesome write.

Powerfully penned, Fia. Another excellent write with many deep layers my friend. This one has a musing vibe while turbulence is stirring beneath the surface. I concur with Mark. Amazing read as always. Appreciate you, Cuz.

Damian

willow… wow… when I heard this its as if I was sitting on that porch listening to the the story… amazing

Beautiful. I love this. Powerful. Vivid and sharp.

First off, the rhyme scheme is on point. I can tell you really had to pull some crafty words to make the rhyme and tempo stay true. You succeeded. The story within is great, it follows through well and ends with a great mood.
Awesome Willow.

I just listened to the recording! The music matched the tone of your write perfectly.
Even the voice! I’m all for letting go of dead weight in any write. Nicely done:)

Powerfully penned, Willow. Another excellent write that exercises demons while telling this tale of survival my friend. The music sets the mood as the voice delivers the truth while speaking your words with precision. Goosebumps on this one. Amazing read/listen as always. Appreciate you, Sis.

Damian

Interesting piece. Bugs and fans…😊

Powerfully penned, Bat. Another excellent write with deep layers my friend. Can’t believe I missed this one. Amazing read as always. Hope all is well in your neck of the woods. Appreciate you.

Damian