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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Here is Guillotine bi-trillets
The ring of steel bells. beckons us to hell
The audience ignores the sound
Multiple bodies hit the groundThe chiming goes on, sings a restless song
Unrelenting sorrowful tears
The heart shutters to stop in fearHope is so far gone, whispered please at dawn
Guillotine swinging in the sun
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Thank you
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You’re ever-so welcome, Fia
My apology: I forgot an edit; V2-L3, (shuttering should be shuddering).
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It’s okay. That took me three tries. Lol
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YEAH, ya killed it!
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Bravo, Fia. You know how to tell a story my friend. This is really good, can’t wait to hear more. Take a bow!! Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Thank you Damian 😊 working on the next part
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Never hearing your voice before, Fia 👀👂
I did not know what to expect, but I can’t say I’m disappointed in any way … actually, I was quite taken with how smoothly soft ‘n sultry, creamy ‘n smooth it is, as though my mind was being caressed through my ears on a warm, gentle breeze by a hundred dandelion flowers.
I heard no reason for the “Adult” sticker … YET, anyway. Now, at least, I’m prepared for any sweetly naughty surprise one might hope for!. ; p
Anyone ever tell you you’re a VERY talented lady?
YEP! That’s my outlook! ⁓ Richard🖌-
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Thank you, Richard. I put the adult sticker because I figured I might as well start from the beginning. lol
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Hmmm?
Gonna keep us hangin’ in suspense, eh?-
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Working on it. Had a head cold. I Sound nasally
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Ohhh, NO, Fia!
Don’t tell me you normally sound like Betty Boop? 🙄
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Amazing! You’re a talent!
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Secret Ride (magic of Poetic Voice)
He came at night,
On a wind of heat.
A bead of sweat,
On lips so sweet.
“Come with me”
He whispered close.
They are all asleep,
Said, my sexy host.
I crawled out of bed.
On crumpled sheets.
A teddy that cling,
To my heat.
Just be quiet.
It will be fun.
No one will know,
Not even one.
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Ahhh, Fia
I so love and enjoy the fun of how you’ve used your amazingly gifted poetic voice to blend the vibrant colors, hues, and textures of your deliciously delightful diction to paint word pictures into our joy-filled imaginations, in such ways it all comes to life.
Your short lines build a quick cadence, and with spot-on line-bnreaks, r…Read More
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Thank you 😊
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Beautifully penned, Fia. Appreciate you, cuz.
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Thank you Damian
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Here is the Eye’s Open sonnet. Thank you, Richard, for helping me understand the nuances of a sonnet
Was born with eyes wide-open on that day,
to be prepared for seeing every truth …
not wanting to offend in any way,
for what had happened up there on the roof.While holding onto pasts, like in a box …
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Nice
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Beautifully rendered, Fia
You make sharing and teaching a distinct pleasure.
Thank you for always joining-in and inspiring us! ⁓ Richard-
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Thank you
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“KLINK!”
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Nice to see the structured discipline.
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Thank you, Jim;))
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Now this is what I call perfect poetry
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Thank you, Sam:))
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Thank you so much for the compliment. I enjoyed the processes and your guidance.
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Anytime, Fia,
The pleasure of sharing with You is a true blessing! ⁓ Richard🖌
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Should have been: “V2, L2&4”
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Goodness-ME, Fia!🍷
I’m amazed at how well you’ve done with your first effort at writing a Sonnet … it just goes to show the wonders waiting to be unlocked and freed under the surface of one’s bountiful potential.
This is no small accomplishment, and one you should be exceedingly proud of, as only a rare few of all poetesses and poets can compose a correct Sonnet. The Sonnet form is known as the Rolls Royce of poetry, and due to its “iambic pentameter” requirement many give-up before ever mastering its beautifully rhythmical unstressedSTRESSED meter.
How exemplary your natural creativity fits so smoothly into the diction and syntax of each line, and how perfectly your lines enjamb and break. Emotion, metaphor, imagery, grammar, spot-on rhymes (except, V2, L3&4, but it’s near-rhyme and can be addressed anytime) … also, your all around theme and ambiance are held faithfully throughout.
Poignantly sad, you convey a tale so many can relate to in so many ways … you’re an amazingly original poetess, Fia, with a broad potential to master the art of poetry few possess.
Thank you for sharing your lovely potic skills, to inspire us all at the “Back to Poetry Basics” group.
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Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent sonnet my friend, you can do anything you put your mind to cuz. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you needed help with this, but it came out good;))
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Tremendous work.
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Gobsmacking good, Fia!
When you can take a form like this one you’ve never even seen before, observe a few easy details – then, with an earnest effort, turn it into such a creatively captivating poetic tale, makingi it seem effortless – now, that’s something to be proud of, because not everyone possesses this level of potential and/or natural…Read More