Adel that kicked out of the garden where there is nowhere to go. That is a good line. Enjoyed this piece

Nirvana – Pennyroyal Tea (Live And Loud, Seattle / 1993)

One of my favorites by them – Nirvana – Radio Friendly Unit Shifter (Live And Loud, Seattle / 1993)

This poem is friggin deep. One of your best. There’s so much here that stands out. That rebellion that starts from disappointment or betrayal. It’s like you’re saying – I what? I can’t eat that apple? Get out of the way! Crunch!

I went to a catholic school – first to eigth grade. Imagine my horror when a detective called me one day asking if I was sexually abused there. It turns out many were. I never knew it.

My faith has gone back and forth. I believe, to…Hmm, looking around, I don’t know.

There’s a lot going on in this, but I love it. It stands out. Great work, Adelly.

Every single line felt .. and felt deeply .. no effort required to feel where you are coming from .. and with much respect, much respect & write on, because you do it so well Neville 😎🌻👍

Thanks Damien,
I truly don’t believe there is a wrong religion. As long as it isn’t hurting anyone and feeding your spirit positively.
For me it’s also geographical and cultural. I’m Hispanic and was raised with the Catholic Church so that is what I practiced as a young adult. As I got older I got curious about other religions. And I can thank the late goddess Tina Turner for that. Yes I watched the movie What’s love got to do with it! Lol.
She had a strict Baptist upbringing and later in life embraced Buddhism. It’s inspiring:)
You can always change your mind, even when it comes to something so sacred as religion.

Thanks for stopping by amigo!

It’s interesting to me how the movement of this is similar to a snake, it winds its way down. And those last lines are powerful! I have a complicated relationship with faith. What I’ve resolved as my peace is that I don’t believe in religion but I have a deeply spiritual connection with my faith. Great write!

(What Willow said!)

Hey beautiful. I am in love with your energy, as much as everything else about you. This write is a great example of what you can create from that incredible mind of yours. Hell yes I’m partial! But I’m also smart as hell. I know what is worth my life. You and your talents.
Bravo mi amor.

This is good informative poem. My son has dyslexia and though it takes him a little longer to read things, it does not change who he is. I love when I can relate to a piece

You are you and that is all that matters. Great poem.

you sure do shine beautiful Jackie I leave out whole words my brain says are there you have my sympathy ❤️

Powerfully penned, Jackie. Amazing write my friend. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

The Queen is a dark bad ass. Like the lay out and the rhyme scheme.

Hello Honoria,what a treat to see you here.
Like I was telling Crim it took me all night to write this poem. I’m pretty happy with the outcome. Thanks for looking, sweetheart.
Miss you
Jackie xx

Hello Damian.
Always a pleasure to see you on my page. I appreciate you too thank you my friend.
Jackie xx

Hi there vision, thank you. It means a lot and thank you for reading it and commenting. Appreciate you.
Jackie xx

Thank you very much Abby appreciate you.
Jackie xx

the ballerina and the ragdoll comparison to women was written beautifully. Always on the tip toes but at times need a wall to lean against to keep you up right.

Hello Fia!
I think some men take it for granted that women are human. Really. My using ragdoll had a purpose, in that it does indeed mean a collapse.
Thank you, too, for the feedback.

hello dearest Styxian I love how you talked about her hanging on every word and vowel… so rich is your languag you can’t help but lift her this is beautifully poignant ❤️

I have a tendency to watch their lips, when someone is talking to me. It helps me understand them better. But, in this write it has more of a sensual purpose, obviously!
Thank you Crims. I’m still trying to post some decent stuff, so thanks for letting me know it’s not bad.

Hahaha, we’re getting a blend of soft core and hard core beautifully woven within this piece. We love the way that you flipped things showing your versatility and still kept it clean. Tight

Passionately penned, Mark. This is an excellent write full of deep wonderful layers my friend. Always enjoy your storytelling my brother. Another amazing read. Appreciate you.

Damian

Damn…the ragdoll analogy just knocked me on my ass. Some of us feel more ragdoll than ballerina all the time, and never a Barbie. I will say, as a girl who loved dolls, ragdolls are more resilient though, Barbies break easily. I love the quiet messages whispering through this

There’s a level of intimacy conveyed with compassion and understanding
that effortlessly flows through your poetic verbiage, speaking to the human condition
like none other. Standing ovation all around

Much respect

Naaj

I agree with Willow.
Ragdolls are more resilient. They might get scuffed up and look weathered over time but they are still together. Even if by some chance they do get torn apart, they can be sewn back together with new material or a different color of string. And maybe they can sew it themselves and choose a variety of colors or patterns we’ve always dreamed of.

Love this piece!

Although when I was little I did get the Barbie car!! Haha

Dear M,

I really enjoyed the analogies and storyline in this piece. The fragility of life and that sacred place in our heads where we go to live out our safety dreams was wonderful the way you expressed it. This was enthralling and emotionally moving. While I’d love to be ballerina Barbie I find more mental flexibility in being raggedy Ann. Lovely write. H🌷

and the ground shook beneath me as I danced too!!

Absolutely felt this with everything inside me🤍

I was the kid who made “Weird Barbies”, complete with permanent marker makeup…

But anyway, your poem — gosh I love your writing. You seem to have a way of really seeing people, and all the various dancing, flopping dolls that they are in their heads. What a gift. And well… the subtle erotica… what a lovely addition. Three cheers!

❤️k