Born from the rib of my brother
Didn’t ask to be the starter sister
Looking over my shoulder
Lost eyes searching for my mother.
Guess it wasn’t meant to be
Long past time to be set free
So I headed toward the Knowledge Tree
The slithering snake was irrelevant
Didn’t feel right being a servant
Needing to make my own mistakes
In the form of a shiny ruby red apple
Juicy and plump ready for the pluck
My sharp teeth wished me luck
As I took my first bite of rebellion
And chewed
An eternity has passed since
I bruised the ego
Kicked out of the Garden of Eden
With nowhere to go
I didn’t cry or need any tissues
For my heavenly father issues
Instead I raised the bar
Aimed bullet shooting stars
Towards faithful addicted hearts
Straight from my parched lips
A death wish kiss
Now I’m tending fields of orchard nations
Apples replaced with heart palpitations
Miles as far as the eye can see
My own exoskeleton knowledge trees
Trunk shells kept strong
By these faithful heartbeats
Indulged by my heavenly father
Who doesn’t cry or need any tissues
For his heavenly daughter issues
hello beautiful Adelphina this is really, really great… I lost my mom when I was little too…I don’t see God as most people I went to the churches and didn’t find him there instead I found him in nature and I also found out we are much more like him than we think… this open and wonderful with dark undertones ❤️
I feel everyone interprets god as a man. I keep thinking about Eve being female looking around for her mother. You know, someone to relate to and explain things, so she did what any young female does with so many rules. Rebels.
I keep having this vision in my head.
Of her on a balcony holding her daughter’s hand overlooking her orchard of trees filled with hearts. Real ones!!
The trees have veins and everything. lol.
Thanks for stopping by Chica
that’s quite a vision I have visions too of the garden it’s interesting ❤️
Powerfully penned, Adel. Excellent write my friend. Faith is something that works differently for each person and their relationship with God, in my opinion. I remembered this one, especially the part about Nirvana and Pennyroyal Tea. Nicely done as always. Appreciate you.
Damian
Thanks Damien,
I truly don’t believe there is a wrong religion. As long as it isn’t hurting anyone and feeding your spirit positively.
For me it’s also geographical and cultural. I’m Hispanic and was raised with the Catholic Church so that is what I practiced as a young adult. As I got older I got curious about other religions. And I can thank the late goddess Tina Turner for that. Yes I watched the movie What’s love got to do with it! Lol.
She had a strict Baptist upbringing and later in life embraced Buddhism. It’s inspiring:)
You can always change your mind, even when it comes to something so sacred as religion.
Thanks for stopping by amigo!
Adel that kicked out of the garden where there is nowhere to go. That is a good line. Enjoyed this piece
Hi Fia:)
You know when you’re writing and it just flows. This was one of those writes for me.
Everything fell into place:)
Thanks for stopping by!
Nirvana – Pennyroyal Tea (Live And Loud, Seattle / 1993)
One of my favorites by them – Nirvana – Radio Friendly Unit Shifter (Live And Loud, Seattle / 1993)
This poem is friggin deep. One of your best. There’s so much here that stands out. That rebellion that starts from disappointment or betrayal. It’s like you’re saying – I what? I can’t eat that apple? Get out of the way! Crunch!
I went to a catholic school – first to eigth grade. Imagine my horror when a detective called me one day asking if I was sexually abused there. It turns out many were. I never knew it.
My faith has gone back and forth. I believe, to…Hmm, looking around, I don’t know.
There’s a lot going on in this, but I love it. It stands out. Great work, Adelly.
Hi Tim!! Hahaha.
Hell yeah, I said move out of the way and took two bites instead of one. Hehehe
What can I say, listening to Nirvana got me in a mood. Especially the opening line where he sang -I’m on my time with everyone.
I don’t know, i felt like why wait, i’ll take a bite of that apple right now. And it grew from there.
Like I was telling Damien. Follow what feeds your spirit in a positive way. Whatever that may be.
As simple as it sounds do what makes you happy:)
Thanks for your snaps on my write amigo!
Every single line felt .. and felt deeply .. no effort required to feel where you are coming from .. and with much respect, much respect & write on, because you do it so well Neville 😎🌻👍
Hi Nev!
Thank you for that.
It was quite the feeling when I sat back after I was done and thought to myself, did I write that?
I actually went to an open mic night in town and read a couple of my poems. I’m thinking about reading this one next time.
I’d love to see the reaction. lol
Thanks for your snaps amigo!
My absolute pleasure .. Neville 😎🌻👍
It’s interesting to me how the movement of this is similar to a snake, it winds its way down. And those last lines are powerful! I have a complicated relationship with faith. What I’ve resolved as my peace is that I don’t believe in religion but I have a deeply spiritual connection with my faith. Great write!
Hi Willow.
I’ve come to embrace faith.
It’s so much more stronger than religion in my opinion.
For me being female is powerful. Choosing knowledge for me is sensible not a crime.
I was always confused about why that choice had such consequences for a bible that is supposed to be about forgiveness.
I know it plays a larger role about giving us choices but still. Didn’t sit well with me.
Girl, don’t get me started! Hahaha
Thanks for stopping by:)
(What Willow said!)
Hey beautiful. I am in love with your energy, as much as everything else about you. This write is a great example of what you can create from that incredible mind of yours. Hell yes I’m partial! But I’m also smart as hell. I know what is worth my life. You and your talents.
Bravo mi amor.
Hahaha. Hey big sexy! I wrote this way back when I was going through a religion crisis!
Went to a church, no not a catholic one, someplace different and what they were saying just really put me off, so I left.
We find our way eventually. Just like I found my way to you:)
In that regard I am very blessed. You are an incredible human and I am so lucky to spend the rest of my life with you:)
Plus you bought me converse shoes too! What more can I ask for!
Love you baby! MWA!😘
(a second ring…)
Awwwww. Yesssssss! Lol