This is good. Why would it be the only story you write ?

Powerfully penned, Tim. I wouldn’t give up on storytelling my friend, this is a really good story. I liked this a lot, If I’m ever in the neighborhood, we’ll take a walk. lol. Appreciate you.

Damian

Powerful work. Great storytelling.

Don’t listen to nay sayers Tim
I did that with my art stuff
Listened to the wrong people tell me my stuff wasn’t any good
Then I stopped listening and said to myself
I’m doing this for me
Fuck everyone else

Keep writing stories Tim

BIG LIKE

I enjoyed this. I grew up with trains and hobos, so the subject is something I find very interesting. You say you’ve just started writing short stories and in my book, you’re off to a bang up start. Also, your writing is lean and correct–just the way it should be.

Powerful work. Excellent.

Time this is engaging prose that took me into the scene. You write excellent accounts and I for one am a big fan of your writing here. Truly hauntingly powerful. Starts off like an ordinary day and then full of surprises.

John

A great metaphorical poem, Thomas.

this is beautiful in its expression excellent 💕writing is very much the same for me…

great write dearest Thomas very excellent I feel you on this 💕

So many great, relatable metaphors in this. I enjoyed this.

Powerfully penned, Thomas. This is an excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

lol. Thank you.

Ya know, I’ve learned to approach your kitchen with caution. You keep with high HEAT up in here! Embers are full blown blaze! 🔥

My words to this Embers would not be satisfactory. You stoked this to the point that the fire reignited, Jeezzz!
Really good.

I don’t know why it changed “cook” to “keep”…🤦‍♀️

Passionately penned, Naaj. This write is fire my brother, fucking blazing! Much respect. Appreciate you.

Damian

My, my my. I had to take time to inhale this comment! Thank you, Adira for your sharing your energy.
It’s so deeply appreciated.

Grandma knew exactly what to do with us. 6 of us & she never lost her temper. Good memories…Thank you, girl

hello beautiful Willow this was a twist I didn’t know where you were going it’s very clever and relateable I had to clean my dad’s grandfather clock when naughty 💕

Brilliantly penned, Willow. Into the book it belongs! Amazing storytelling my friend, I can relate. Not that I got in trouble a lot, but when I did, not a fun time by any means of the imagination. Excellent work, as always. Appreciate you.

Damian

I love “old timey” pieces. It brings back the good ol days, even if we didn’t know that they were, then. I would’ve preferred the chair over the usual ass whuppin.
But eh, I survived.
It’s always interesting to me how others lived and dealt with their own upbringings. This was a wonderful story indeed. I raised my kids on “time out” instead of spankings, as your story reflects. It’s a better choice.
Very entertaining write, Willow. Bravo.

It’s good to see YOU here, too.