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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
bi-trillets attempt. this one wasn’t easy for me…never do well when rhymin is involved.
endless night confession
breathe in the black smoke, love feels like a joke
the nights we wasted tasted strange
cheap liquor kiss, dirty exchangeyou were my worst itch, struck like a kill switch
old barroom lungs in borrowed light
we swore we’…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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I wonder if we are readin the same poem. I really expected this one to get marked up with a red pen on all the places I went wrong. I appreciate your input and the lessons you’re providin. I’ll agree with you on fixin the rhyme so I’ll add the s to pain. but you’re gonna have to pry my lowercase letters and lack of punctuation from my cold dead ha…Read More
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Ha-hahhhh!
That’s a given, M’Friend, but I’ll never give-up on ya. 🤓
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Read MoreShe dropped her robe.Naked and defenceless,she stood theredaring meto say something,to do something.But I couldn’t.I was rendered mute and immobileby the beauty before me.My eyes drank in everything,and my mind raced,pulling me backto another momentthe first timeher robe fell...
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Now that is want and reverence to the beauty of the female body. Nicely done
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Thanks Fia
All women are beautiful just some more than others.😜💋
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Beautifully penned, Peter. This is truly a glorious write my friend and I agree with you wholeheartedly. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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The hips of passing years This is a gooder.
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Thanks for the comment Atticus.
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Bravo, Fia. You know how to tell a story my friend. This is really good, can’t wait to hear more. Take a bow!! Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Thank you Damian 😊 working on the next part
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Never hearing your voice before, Fia 👀👂
I did not know what to expect, but I can’t say I’m disappointed in any way … actually, I was quite taken with how smoothly soft ‘n sultry, creamy ‘n smooth it is, as though my mind was being caressed through my ears on a warm, gentle breeze by a hundred dandelion flowers.
I heard no reason for the “Adult” sticker … YET, anyway. Now, at least, I’m prepared for any sweetly naughty surprise one might hope for!. ; p
Anyone ever tell you you’re a VERY talented lady?
YEP! That’s my outlook! ⁓ Richard🖌-
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Thank you, Richard. I put the adult sticker because I figured I might as well start from the beginning. lol
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Hmmm?
Gonna keep us hangin’ in suspense, eh?-
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Working on it. Had a head cold. I Sound nasally
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Ohhh, NO, Fia!
Don’t tell me you normally sound like Betty Boop? 🙄
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Amazing! You’re a talent!
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Read MoreFull moon in love Once in a month I cry for your love Without words but loud and clear v Don't look around you, I'm not here Find me high in the sky above Sometimes I reach out for you My moonbeam fingers stroke your...
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This is perfect for a full moon. Thank you for sharing it again:))
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Beautifully penned, Elke. Excellent write my friend. Thanks so much for sharing. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Love everything about this, Elke. One who’s passionate about poetry can recognize another.
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A beautiful write my friend. Your poetry always shines. xo
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Read MoreWe roam On the pavements of the Earth Riding the buses of the world Weaving in and out Of the fingers Into the palms Of the thieving hands Above Long drilling nails Dug into this land Scratching at the soul
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Interesting the way you put it. Stealing from the earth, taking from Mother Nature.
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Thanks for reading
It’s a dark one.
Regards
James
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A brilliant submittal, Syr Dru
Congratulations on another successfully excellent effort in displaying such admirable skill in the true essence and grasp of that which is conveyed in these earnestly shared teaching sessions.
Your poetic potential is second to none … this piece is spot-on in every sense of the phrase: meter, poetic voice, i…Read More