a pure masterpiece dearest Clive I am utterly enchanted ❤️

you’re so dark dearest Benjamin intiguing ❤️

This poem is heavy. Dark and intriguing. Nice work.

I imagine a grotto with the rocks are covered in with orange red seaweed. Then again, I see a grunion run when they come out of the sand, and the eyes look almost blue black

Powerfully penned, Benjamin. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Powerfully penned, Benjamin. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

hello dearest Benjamin I love your style I have chills❤️

This is a beautiful compilation of imagery in this form

To write a whole poem as haikus/senryus is outstanding! that’s a talent, I remember reading some poets composing few verses as haikus/senryus but not long as yours here, and most of your verses can stand alone as it is. I could feel here how nature is angry and speaking to now world where humans played with its rawness, the old genuine days against the new fake days, at the end the writer seemed to be fed up and welcoming the end if this end means the end of all madness, maybe then a new earth will be born.

A life well lived…

Much respect

Naaj

Thanks for the info, Fia. Appreciate you, cuz.

Damian

good evening dearest Damian I feel the emotions behind your lyrics well done ❤️

It reads like an anthem for introverts. Society doesn’t like us much. They don’t like nuance & complication. We often find ourselves at the mercy of the abuser without even playing the game. They want easy, straightforward answers and guaranteed results, but like Kierkegaard said, “the crowd is untruth”.

Phenomenal piece of poetry (lyrics) Damian. You are a talent. Your writing always shines!

This hits hard and I like the rhythm of the piece.

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mary. So glad you connected with the lyrics my friend. One of my goals as a writer whether it be lyrics, poetry, or prose was the hope that my readers or listeners would know they’re not alone in their troubles in this world. Appreciate you.

Damian

It’s a damn shame this one didn’t get its voice. I can hear it in my head. It’s powerful. You going to give it an album slot? Hint…hint… Seriously though, this is a fantastic piece. Going in my list, my friend!

Powerful work. Great writing.

You did an exceptional work here, You’ve expressed emotionally and psychically what abuse is, another lines that caught my attention,

“i am judged for their crimes
captive in a cell called resent”

It’s when we get above our victim character we forive and we are free, we don’t forgive for them, we forgive for ourselves, for us living a life we deserve. Yet, some people don’t understand that this process doesn’t end in one day or two! and even many of those who were under abuse may spend their whole life without completely recover, and You see some people judge their actions, behaviors, way of living… etc putting more pressure on their emotional state making them shrink more into their own safety bubble. They don’t recognize the amount of work these persons have been doing to overcome their pains and hurt… then You see someone throw a silly ignorant word/s making things worse, like You are being the criminal instead of the victim.