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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Was born with eyes wide open
To be prepared for the truth
Not wanting to offend
What had happened on the roofHolding pasts in a box
We crawl, we stand, then walk
Rusty keys enter locks
Speaking words before caughtStreams of tears without sound
Lover’s end, rings withdrawn
heartbeat forever unbound
Dawn shows you were a p…Read More2 Comments-
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Thank you
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Read MoreMelancholy sits quietly and I with herwith a gentle remider to breathewe watch the cotton candy clouds flow byas we lie watching blue skiesa stark contast to our moodhurt on a colorful dayit seems wrong and out of placethe...
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Beautifully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend, really dig this one a lot. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian good evening thank you graciously I’m happy you liked it ❤️
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Lovely piece Brenda. The words are marvelously woven to create a delicate, fragile piece of poetry. xo
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hi dearest Keith good evening thank you my friend I can be gentle when I want to ❤️
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I wonder if that spider, doing what nature intended, ever said to himself – what a lovely day it is today?
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I don’t know dearest Tim I believe if we listen we can hear nature and the earth talk…it is at all possible…everything has a frequency thank you for your thoughts ❤️
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Such a fine verse. I really needed that. TY & hugs+++
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hello dearest Jim thank you graciously I know my metaphors are funny I’m happy it worked for you ❤️
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Read MoreShe steps from the showera vision of warmth and water and light. Steam still clinging to her skin,drops tracing paths down her shoulders,the air itself seems to hush for her.That towel, drawn so tight to guard her beauty.Shapes that...
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They are usually the reason we ever learned what longing means.. and the reason we write about it… beautiful
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Thank you p, Sam. Grateful for your comments.
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This is so excellent. I’m really glad I read it, thanks for posting.
This particular stanza didn’t read smooth. If I may suggest…
That towel, is drawn tight
to guard her beauty.
His hands still remember
the soft curve shapes of her lovely breasts,
the gentle hollow where shadows meet.Great writing.
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Thanks for reading, and for your thoughtful analysis,Tim. I appreciate your constructive criticism very much.
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My pleasure. 🙂 Awesome poem.
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Incredible ink .. and so perfectly spilled ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐👍
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Thanks, Nev!
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Read Morepart one:All addictions start with suffering.All addictions end with suffering.part two:Addiction beginswhere silence screams.Voids filled withthe cold retreat of alcohol,tobacco’s dry whisper,the sharp thrill of cocaine,gambling’s pulse,screens pulsing past midnight,the slow hunger for shopping,the aching need for moisture from...
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hello dearest Benny my pain is just too great to live any other way I’ve really honestly tried more than once and I will never willingly put myself through that again… this is powerful if you have a better way to cope I am happy for you my friend ❤️
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The root cause of all suffering is thinking.That’s where the answer lies.
I coped by reading as much as I could about depression, grief,the way our minds work and trick is.The best material,without sounding religious,was in Buddhism.
Happy to share some authors with you if you’re interested.
🙏🙏🙏🙏
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Intelligent poem here dude. Well said and well executed.
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Brilliant work.
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Daniel Long wrote a new post
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Read MoreMirrors mirroring not what mirrors mirror. Drinking this mirage, emulating my form. Echoes of reflecting thoughts exuding an air of sorrow. The presences within the glass, weeps deeply at its glassy heart. A blind man I am, staring into this mirror. Blinded in darkness, yet sighting the pain. These curtained eyes, sightful...
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Thanks. It’s a wonder publishers nor agents are getting back to me to publish my work. Read your piece: Brutal. Very deep and kept me hooked.
Daniel
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Beautiful Daniel. Love the flow and wordplay in this!
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Okay, Fia 👌 Thanks for your submission and participation. You’ve made a very good start, with the basic format of a Sonnet down pat … 3 Quatrains and a Rhyming Couplet, and your rhyme-scheme is spot-on. In particular, your topic is interesting, with emotion depth, strong metaphorical imagery, and captivating ambiance that sets the mood. With a b…Read More