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    Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”

    5 months, 2 weeks ago

    Was born with eyes wide open
    To be prepared for the truth
    Not wanting to offend
    What had happened on the roof

    Holding pasts in a box
    We crawl, we stand, then walk
    Rusty keys enter locks
    Speaking words before caught

    Streams of tears without sound
    Lover’s end, rings withdrawn
    heartbeat forever unbound
    Dawn shows you were a pawn

    Forever ending the life that could be built
    Walking away with heads bowed in guilt

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    • Okay, Fia 👌 Thanks for your submission and participation. You’ve made a very good start, with the basic format of a Sonnet down pat … 3 Quatrains and a Rhyming Couplet, and your rhyme-scheme is spot-on. In particular, your topic is interesting, with emotion depth, strong metaphorical imagery, and captivating ambiance that sets the mood. With a bit of concentration on the Iambic meter aspect and 10-count lines, you’ll have a fine proper English Sonnet. We’ll work on it together. Good work, Lady-Poet!.⁓ Richard🖌

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