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    Neruda's Lips

    Neruda’s Lips   I have flayed your body with my tongue of fire, suckled your youthful breasts with lust and desire, eaten your musky whispers with the deadliest of sins, and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.   You are the poetry of my land, the dark earth...

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    • This poem beautifully channels Neruda’s sensual spirit. The union of passion, earth, and language. The imagery feels both intimate and elemental, echoing the way Neruda made love and nature inseparable.

      It’s a stirring tribute that captures his essence…beautifully penned.

      • Neruda’s love sonnets are some of the best poetry ever written (IMHO). And yes, exactly, love and nature are inseparable, flowing in and around each other. Thank you, RomaJ for your lovely and muchly appreciated comment and visit. You are always welcome to walk through my poetry.

    • This has so much passion in this. I agree with Romaj beautifully penned.

    • Damn!
      Excellent! You had me at “flayed”. What a vivid, well placed word.

      • I love that word (flayed). It felt and sounded right to use it in this poem. Thanks for your observation and for the fine comment.

    • You turned the poem into something else with this, “and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.” Following the next verse, IF you didn’t brilliantly did this, it would have been just a strong sensual poem, but with how amazingly You brought a higher level with the last two line of verse one, then the gorgeous verse two, is what makes the poem very special to me, exploring and expressing a deeper connection. I believe Pablo would admire this🤍

      • One of the things I love about Neruda’s poetry is his use of everyday words. With them, he word paints images, metaphors and a feeling of LIFE that exists and surrounds us with HOPE.

        Light, thank you so much for your insight and understanding of what I wanted (no, needed) to express. If Neruda were still alive, I think I would be tempted to send this poem to him.

    • It was/is my pleasure to “whisper” and a big Thank You to the Roman Goddess, daughter of Cupid and Psyche. It’s not often I get a comment from royalty. Not sure I am worthy, but it is appreciated muchly.

    • You are most welcome my friend🌸 and consider your poem sent, his soul is still out there, just call Him 😊

    • Yes, please post it. I would love to read what, how you see Neruda’s love sonnets.

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    the last time

       dare you breathe menot air,dare I lit my love in your eyesin your heart.   on earth, I walk my last timeundefeated and opened,as I've walked heavens many times I do know,the difference betweenthe touch and the sensation,between others and you.   ...

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    • When we write our words, we do leave pieces of us on the page. We are the words, we are the message that we want the reader to “breathe” in and savor. Your pen name, as one of the fundamental elements, is what is seen, heard and felt in this poem, Light! The air that words breathe!

      -Curt

      (ps. in your 3rd line did you mean to say “lit” or “light’ or “lite”?? I hope you don’t mind my asking.)

      • Good Coffee Morning ☕

        PLEASE, share and ask anything, it’s how we develop besides my English isn’t the best😊

        I mean the verb of “light”, lit, kindle… if You have suggestions or if You have other thoughts, I’m opened ears.

        Thank You again for such a kind and heartwarming visit, yesterday out of nowhere the first words of this poem were ringing in my head, so I said there is no problem in sharing something old. I’m happy I did 😊

    • I love the idea of poems as morsels of our soul.
      Lovely write.
      And the pic is beautiful!

    • Truly lovely. It’s gentle yet strong in its invitation. A lure perhaps. Of allure!

      • It’s also lovely that You could see it as “gentle yet strong” because it’s what I meant it to be😄. short, brilliant and a truly appreciated review! Thank You gratefully my friend ✨

    • Hi there sweet friend 🌸

      your words are gentle and calm, radiates with true kindness. Thank You deeply for feeling with it your heart🤍 may your days be filled with light, peace, and love✨🕊️💕

    • How I wish I had got here first .. I had been waiting for these words to ease or take away my hunger .. Having said that, I am not surprised that so many others beat me to them as I imagine those that have visited you before were just as hungry as me .. Another keeper as far as I am concerned .. Shine on dear Light now and always .. Your friend, Me .. 💛⭐🌟⭐🌟🌻👍

      • Neville never fails to make G girl’s heart smiles and flatter💓 I’m really and truly grateful for your words and friendship🤍 may your heart knows only joy and happiness ✨🙏🏻✨ your friend too, Me*

    • Hi there sweet friend 🌸

      your words are gentle and calm, radiates with true kindness. Thank You deeply for feeling with it your heart🤍 may your days be filled with light, peace, and love✨🕊️💕

    • I’ve checked some of your poems yesterday but there were unavailable to leave reviews, I thought I should tell You this 😊

    • I did read your Bio before checking your poems, so all is understand, it’s your respected choice to protect yourself and your poetry at the time being, Nice to meet You Fiery friend 🔥😊

    • The same to you lovely friend🌺 and a very Good Morning to you🌞 (it’s 10:31 am here). Have a fantastic beauty day, night and all times 🤍😊

    • Beautifully penned, Light. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.

      Damian

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    Coming Home: Songs of Africa

    COMING HOME: SONGS OF AFRICA“Always, there is someone hungrier than the poorest in America.”“Some of us know how we came by our fortunes, and some of us don’t, but we wear it all the same. There is only one...

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    • What a raw and intense tribute to Africa!
      I’ve never been but you put into words and song a powerful truth.
      How do we aim to live with it. Just wow

      • Hi Adelphina, thanks for your visit. I wrote this during a time when my poems had more of an ‘edge’ to them. I wanted my poetry to be part of and reflect a culture of resistance, that was not agitprop but still drove straight to the heart of the reader. To tell the truth about the world but not preach at people. This poem began that journey. I liked this poem and so workshopped it with a writers group at the University of Iowa, and then I submitted it to some literary magazines, but none of them printed it. Oh well.

        Adelphina, thank you for your comment; it is truly appreciated.

    • This poem is powerful. Both a song of mourning and a call to remembrance. I love how the repetition and rhythm make “Africa” itself feel like a heartbeat pulsing through each stanza.

      The imagery is rich with longing and pride, and the movement from loss to reclamation is deeply moving. It feels like a spiritual homecoming through language itself.

    • What a beautiful comment, RomaJ. Thank you so much. You might be surpised, but a few of the people in the writers group (mentioned above to Adelphina) expressed similar feelings. But they also tore through it viciously. This is the final version.

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