hello dearest Benny good afternoon this is a morbid thought but I live in the country and while outside the flies were driving me nuts and it occurred to me we were walking carcasses and the little bastard was looking for a way in while I was yet living… what happens at a funeral you are right I just hope by then I am onto better things this is a great write ❤️

I was tasked with doing several military funerals back in my Army days. It is extremely somber. And, the occasional one after the military years. I’ve always tried to think of it as a celebration of their life. Sometimes it’s how we get through such things.
Your write is a really good “on point” of how it can play out. And how you built the scenario earlier.
Who knows, man, who knows. best we enjoy it while we can.

Powerful piece my friend. The wording and the flow of this poem gives me a chill and makes me think of my very own existence. Marvelous write Benny.

Neruda would’ve invited you over for a beer on the veranda, and talk words with you. What an afternoon that woulda been, huh. You’d fit right in.

You just nailed the seasons here Curt .. well you did, all bar Summer .. Now I’m betting you are going to have one hell of a time between the coming of Spring & Autumn .. Write on brother .. Neville

Love love this one… it’s one of those that flows sweetly from the heart into ours, just how love should flows. “welcome the chaos of your smile” how gorgeous this line is… expressing the bittersweet mess love can make us feel, it will stick in my head along other lines too, oh perfect poetry of love ✨💖💕 I like the song too, it fits the emotional ambiance. Thank You🤍

Ms. Mary, within a smile, worlds collide, kaleidoscopes swirl colors, and hearts beat faster into a blush. In other words, CHAOS!!! Who knows what would, or could have happened had those letters been sent, or words spoken? Perhaps a wonderful chaos?

Thank you, Mary. I always look forward to your visits and words.

Thank you so much! It means the world to me. Truly. 💕

Very cool! Hey we like you via your writes! You have a lot going on in your head, so therefore you are not boring right? LOL
I like how you search for what works for you, creativity wise. It reads well as a poem, and then the boom as a song.
This is great stuff.

Truly enjoyed the read then when I reached the bottom and pushed play, it completely elevates your write. Honestly, I enjoy reading first and thinking about how it will sound when I push play
at the bottom. It’s like the music aspect is desert after the meal/read lol
Hope that makes sense.
Keep killing it!

hello dearest Drieks we need hope and no one likes me don’t feel bad…it doesn’t matter what circle I’m in I don’t fit one on one I do great in groups not at all… ps I like you I just have failed to comment much of late… this write you should be proud of ❤️

“I’m the echo in a room that never speaks
Nobody likes me
Because there’s nobody like me
I’m the secret even silence couldn’t keep.”

Powerfully penned, Drieks. Excellent lyrics per usual my friend. That chorus above, next level wordplay! Once again your arrangement highlights your words. Appreciate you.

Damian

Oh, my god this is so good! I just played this so my wife could hear you again (and me) and it is just phenomenal! And what an incredible voice! Give her some love, girl. Plus the music and arrangement, everything is top notch!