• Here is the Eye’s Open sonnet. Thank you, Richard, for helping me understand the nuances of a sonnet

    Was born with eyes wide-open on that day,
    to be prepared for seeing every truth …
    not wanting to offend in any way,
    for what had happened up there on the roof.

    While holding onto pasts, like in a box …
    we crawled, we stood, we soon beg…Read More

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    Eye's Opened (A Sonnet)

    Was born with eyes wide-open on that day,to be prepared for seeing every truth …not wanting to offend in any way,for what had happened up there on the roof. While holding onto pasts, like in a box …we crawled, we...

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    • Nice to see the structured discipline.
      Cathartic work.

    • Now this is what I call perfect poetry

    • Thank you so much for the compliment. I enjoyed the processes and your guidance.

    • Goodness-ME, Fia!🍷

      I’m amazed at how well you’ve done with your first effort at writing a Sonnet … it just goes to show the wonders waiting to be unlocked and freed under the surface of one’s bountiful potential.

      This is no small accomplishment, and one you should be exceedingly proud of, as only a rare few of all poetesses and poets can compose a correct Sonnet. The Sonnet form is known as the Rolls Royce of poetry, and due to its “iambic pentameter” requirement many give-up before ever mastering its beautifully rhythmical unstressedSTRESSED meter.

      How exemplary your natural creativity fits so smoothly into the diction and syntax of each line, and how perfectly your lines enjamb and break. Emotion, metaphor, imagery, grammar, spot-on rhymes (except, V2, L3&4, but it’s near-rhyme and can be addressed anytime) … also, your all around theme and ambiance are held faithfully throughout.

      Poignantly sad, you convey a tale so many can relate to in so many ways … you’re an amazingly original poetess, Fia, with a broad potential to master the art of poetry few possess.

      Thank you for sharing your lovely potic skills, to inspire us all at the “Back to Poetry Basics” group.
      You make an olde bard ‘n teacher so proud and ohhhh-sooo very happy! ⁓ Richard🖌

    • Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent sonnet my friend, you can do anything you put your mind to cuz. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

      Damian

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    Echoes of the past scream on. This pulsation of heinous sound… sound that screeches into my ears!   Echoes of those who scream… This invisible crowd that follows me… Voices! Auditory torments!   Echoes of memory and psychosis… The two entwined like vines over a grave… Bound...

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    Stillness of the musty air entombed… Death vents no last breaths here… My ghostly presence alone is chilling the air around -   So, the Gothic rose grew in the lightless chill of my dark aura… chilling its beating soul.   The cold of my tomb keeps these...

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