I want to say everything will become better. Being that bone aching tired, that even the doctor tells you that you are ok is relatable.
Baby steps to finding a way to feel ok.
Very open poem.

Powerfully penned, Nick. Excellent write my friend. It’s not fun getting old that’s for sure. Amazing flow and wordplay brother. Appreciate you.

Damian

That state of overwhelmed exhaustion seems to be running rampant these days. Everyone I know is always tired and I stopped checking news…it’s so bad these days, they bring it to you. And yeah…getting old sure ain’t for sissies!

Beautifully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Sensual and somewhat sad. Well done.

Omg I just listened to it. The music went so well with words. Bravo to you both

We are deeply grateful for your listening/reading and commenting, dear Valupta!
Elke & Gus

Chère V.,
You know how much I love your talents and writes, so your compliments mean a Lot to me. And Sappho too!

Warm regards, Gus

Of course you have noticed that the mix left something to be desired and the voices were totally out of control, due to overuse and hay fever.
So I’ve re-recorded the singing and made a new mix.

A little bird told me that this one is not perfect, but yes, it’s a bit better.
Hope you’ll like it too.
Kind regards, Gus

and here’s the new one:

I bow most reverently to Sappho ‘n Gus 🙏

Stunningly beautiful, You Two, in every sense of the word.
Artwork choice, title, and the Envelope Form in its abba rhyme-scheme (with spot-on and soft rhymes), work perfectly together, just as your skills harmonized in rendering this lovely, impacting virtual masterpiece in homage to Mother Earth’s ever dwindling beauty and life sustaining wonders.

Simply, an enthralling co-write … love it deeply!
Thank you both! ⁓ Richard🖌

Nits:
(Alas, Gus, your audio was not available, but I imagined how soul-touching it must be.
Check V1-L3, “get” may have been meant as “yet”. Final stanza, L1, should “plead” be “plea”?) 🤓

Chèr Rascal,
The first recording was out of control due to too much hay fever. I should never have posted it.
But a couple of days later it was better. Not perfect at all. But quite honestly, I think perfection is boring as hell.

Your nits are right, yet instead of get was the one I found too, but while singing made that mistake too. The other one I will check out. Sappho and I are non native speakers. So accidents will happen.

Also on behalf of Sappho: we’re grateful for your listen and read.

Listening is half of the fun. I hope:

and here’s the new one:

Kind regards, Sappho and Gus

wonderful collaboration! i enjoyed both the music and the captivating imagery.
the rhyming scheme leads to pleasant fluidity. ~ c

Chère C.,
Hope this finds you well.

Thank you very much for the compliments. It’s always nice to see that people value what you’re doing.

And maybe one day we’ll do a coop too? I would really love that.

Also on behalf of Sappho, I thank you very much. We’re grateful for your listen.

Kind regards, Gus

Seductively penned, Brenda. A very passionate write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Chère C.,
Are you getting better every day or is it my imagination?
I’d welcome both…

Lovely! Painting with Words.
Love it to bits.
Warm regards, Gus

Spicy piece Lady, tight

Beautiful work. Full of passion and desire.