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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
This is my “Magic of Poetic Voice” submission
The Beast Confession
Confessions are made to come from the heart
To make you feel the weight of it
Whether is it good or bad from the start
I need you to sit and understand me a bitI wandered into a space without time
Alone with my thoughts
Never hoping that someone could be…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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Read Morethe mirror had my face againsame bonessame eyes familiar enough to hatebut closerlike it finally knew me I leaned inbreath foggin the glassfinger tracin my jawtestin whether the shape was still minelingerin where skin held heata warmth I hadn’t earned nails...
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“no monster hidden in my ribs
no god curled under my sternum
no poetry sloppily written across bone
just muscle workin outa habit
organs promisin survival
an emptiness runnin straight thru the center
where meanin should’ve lived”Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent write my friend. The lines above are my favorite, but this write was full of great lines brother. Nice work. Appreciate you.
Damian
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The way you strip yourself down to the bones and done with precision. Nicely done 253
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Oh yes… you have piqued
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lol, Oh really?;))
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Piqued but not peaked.💋
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Haha, thank you Peter;))
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Passionately penned, Fia. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Thank you so much Damian;))
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An exciting time in a relationship. Clearly, beautifully stated.
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Thank you, Jim;))
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Chère F.,
I was not looking in your direction
You made my head turnO yes, definitely!
Warm regards, Gus-
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Thank you, Gus
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A very fresh read. Uplifting too.
Regards
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Thank you, James. I appreciate it
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Back for an eye full of beauty!
What a way
To start my Friday!
Warm regards, Gus
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Read More1. color coded I hear colors speakblue says I need therapyred says start a fire 2. where gravity forgot me mood swings on ceilinlaughin where gravity quitsI clap in defeat 3. fetch boy shadows bark my nameI toss one a broken thought it brings...
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Ok you had to do seven not just one. lol These are really good.
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well…I’ve always struggled with moderation. I like to over indulge. lol
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Okay, I’ve never written a Senryu in my life, I’m too lazy to do that. I don’t know much about them: when I saw they were difficult to do correctly, I moved on to my own difficult mise-en-scène: blowing up words and phrases until they made people laugh, regardless of spelling, context or what others thought. But I do know good, smart writing when I see, read, or hear it (my favorite), and you’ve certainly shown us you have that in spades. Or in Senryus at least. Nice work.
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thank you. never written one either. just gave it a go with on the back to basics thing that Rich is doin. it’s interestin learnin new styles…am usually more of a rambler.
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“shadows bark my name
I toss one a broken thought
it brings back a grin”“clarity short out
thoughts glitch like gods on crack
I praise the misfire”Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent writing my friend. Dig these lines above. I couldn’t pick one over the other, killer fucking lines brother. Appreciate you.
Damian
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appreciate you Damian. the second ya picked was the one I was most proud of. felt most like me.
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much appreciated Rich. I enjoyed learnin it from ya.
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Thank you, Dru 🙏
I consider your expressed enjoyment a compliment that deems my endeavors ever-so deeply worthwhile and rewarding … you make teaching and sharing a pleasure.
Your abilities to perceive and follow detail reveals an exemplary potential. And, from others’ positive reviews, I see they feel much the same as I do about your developing skills and knowledge. : )
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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
hopin to receive partial credit for late assignments…
swore under oath
rationality
face down hands cuffed to my tongue
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Love it, Dru
Excellent, in every sense of the word: counts, directives, and intent in following in the spirit that one of the truly tangible facets of what the Senryu is meant to convey.
For me, your Senryu literally strives to express needed fervor for acceptance and the strife to be trusted and believed-in, even though the opposite may appear…Read More
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This is my Magic of Poetic Voice submission
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The Beast Confession
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·Confessions are made to come from the heart
To make you feel the weight of it
Whether is it good or bad from the start
I n…Read More