Hugely complex piece and I love the pic. I like how you use color to reflect emotion. Some great alliteration in this piece and the rare use of personification as well. It highlights the inner struggle as the body continues to persevere. Deep, tantalizing, thought provoking.

xoxo

Powerfully penned, Brenda. Deep write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

hello lovely poetess this is very interesting great write 💕

Hello Crimsin. Thank you for the feedback.

I liked this.

You’re very good a setting up intrigue and suspense

Naaj

Thank you a lot dear.

I love reading your unique and fearless poems Ms A

You spoil me with your words and I like it a lot. 🙂

🙂

Powerful

Holy Damn, Nick. That’s good.
(Take the ‘e’ off your ‘grab’)
I love the refrain. It emphasizes urgency. I like the conversational tone, the second person narrative… the pleading.
This is a gut-wrenching piece, and I can feel it to the core.
Really well done!

Powerfully penned, Nick. Can feel the emotion in your words, great write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

What I love about this piece is emotional intimacy… the shit you talk about at the end of a weekend vacation before Monday morning rolls around and bites you in the butt. You’re looking out over the horizon just wondering what tomorrow will bring, and it’s time to get real about where we are going. Are you with me or not? Am I really what you want? You brace yourself and pray for plain English after laying out your limitations.

I feel the anxiety and sense the reassurance. It’s well written, Nick.

Powerfully penned, Nick. This is an incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Oh wow… I’d call this epic poetry because it tells a story. It’s also confessional.
I love this kind of naughty stuff, Crimsin. Riveting!

Powerfully penned, Brenda. Great storytelling my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian