Powerfully penned, Ambjr. This was an intense write my friend, excellent work. Appreciate you.

Damian

thank you. kinda slowin down there. gonna have to research to come up with more ideas.

Truly excellent content and well penned results.
You are such a good writer. Consistently.

Powerfully penned, Ambjr. Excellent write my friend, sounds like words that should be accompanied by a blues riff. I can relate. Appreciate you.

Damian

thank you. it’s funny that it started as lyrics. original chorus…

this is my last call lullaby
for every fuck up for very fight
for every tear I didn’t cry
for every night I couldn’t lie
don’t save me now don’t ask me why
just let me play before goodbye
let me drown let me go down
in this last call lullaby

Powerfully penned, Ambjr. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

That first stanza..how many people have internal wars that no one sees it makes me sit and think on that. Great opening. Enjoyed this.

guy from AA always tells me. the battle isn’t the whole war.

that he is. smartest person I know.

You are a very good, insightful writer. One of the better writers in here, actually. You know what is valuable in writing; The human condition.
That being said, I’d like to ask a favor of you. Add the “g”s back.
I think I understand why you leave them off, at the end of words. But, I think that by writing the word/s out completely, it adds authenticity to you work moreso.
You have a very keen, mature awareness in writing. I don’t know how old you are in actual years, but you write with a wisdom of someone who has lived quite a bit. By writing the words out, you will gain more credibility with a reading audience. We are all writers here, so we tend to fill in blanks with proper words, etc. But that makes for throwing off the rhythm of the flow. We subconsciously have to “correct” what we are reading. It causes bumps in the road.
You know what I mean?
You write very well. Your readers probably read well, too. So level up your style, it will pay off tremendously.
I do not mean this in a belittling way at all. I really am impressed with your poetry. I always have been. But as an experienced reader, I’d like to see you take that next step. I think it will make a positive difference.
Up to you, of course. But I mean well. You are good at this, your words deserve completion.

Fair enough. We all have an identity that makes us unique. Keep writing good stuff.

Powerfully penned, Ambjr. Once the box is opened, it’s hard to put things back to the way they were. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Very deep! Keep up the good work.

Don’t forget the one that didn’t get out…hope. Some days that’s all we got. If I could, I’d slap this on my reading list