Powerfully penned, twofiftythree. Really dig the layers and your words pierce like daggers my friend. Amazing write. Appreciate you.

Damian

Not for the mess, but for the raw honesty. Authenticity is everything

thank you

Powerfully penned, twofiftythree. Into the book it belongs! I fucking felt this one my friend, all the torment boiling underneath. Excellent write. Appreciate you.

Damian

Outstanding in its strength of word and idea. Powerful write.

You did make it your own, and in that is the sweetest thing ever. Nicely done.

Okay…I got so many thoughts on this incredible piece. First, holy shit, you didn’t paint a picture here. You took us with you. I felt him pacing, felt the hair on the back of my neck stand up, shoulders tensed, you took us there! That alone is insanely amazing. Then you walked us through a claiming of space that had me literally saying “Fuck yeah!” at the last line. Out. Loud. Beyond all that…freaking speechless…

I read this and imagined Bruce Hornsby banging on his keys as he belts out “That’s the way it is”—
and those people “Standin’ in line, marking time, waiting for the welfare dime, cause they can’t buy a job”—
The piano is an inanimate object that the speaker in this poem brings to life…
the poem has life.
Good write.
j.

Powerfully penned, twofiftythree. Love the raw vibe of this one my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

This feels like a night mare while you were awake

Asleep but dreaming of being awake and trying to escape torturous thoughts.
They do find us one way or another. We can smoke our joint to space out and away from what’s closing in, but can we
escape it? I don’t know.
I really like the dialect used here…you do that so well and it fits perfectly with the theme.
j.

Hauntingly penned, Ambjr. Great storytelling and powerful imagery my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Didn’t want too read this through but – of course I did. Your voice was loud and clear whether muttering as you tossed and turned or, were yelling deep down in living hell or – maybe a barbaric battle zone. Or could be the three : a sadistic unholy trinity. Have a feeling that this will linger through my day in great bursts of plasma shooting its way down and down to.. wherever. All too visual -but readers will have his/her own reaction. Cn think of paintings by.. is it Breugel? There’s another.. no matter, your words are more than visual.

Great piece 👍

Very Stephen King-esque.
You build the momentum like he does…and our imagination scares itself from your words.
j.

Powerfully penned, Ambjr. Amazing imagery my friend, excellent work. Appreciate you.

Damian