Cruel intentions sit behind blue eyes
Nothing normal about feeling this way
Crawling on paper skin bruised by lies
Darkness waits to seize a summer day
Sleepless nights filled with frustration
Claustrophobic words shallow and thin
Filtering through arrogant conversation
Naked praise wears this suspicious grin
Verbal viper employed to deflect truth
Suspending the obvious from the light
Devilish deviant hiding his sweet tooth
Unable to curb this voracious appetite
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2025
The last 2 lines are perfect for this. Nicely done
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’m glad they work, they’re starting to grow on me. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
This is smooth! Nice work Damian
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Raven. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
Well, let me tell you how I feel about this one- you killed it.
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mary. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Means a lot to me. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damn…you always take me somewhere with your poetry. This one is no exception. Give those last 2 lines their just dues. They’re fantastic, my friend
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’m all about taking journeys, and inviting others to tag along. I’m glad they work, it took effort to get them to flow right. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
You’ve gotta give yourself more credit, Damian.
The last lines indeed suppressed my own voracious appetite. The last stanza is my favorite.
Nice spill my friend. xx
~P.G💋
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, P.G. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Nice, to see you again. I was pretty confident till the end. lol. It took me awhile to get the flow right, I had went through so many ideas that were cool but wasn’t working right. So though these lines worked I wasn’t sure, but from all the support in the comments, I chose wisely. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
That’s razor-sharp and sinuous—like a poem with fangs. The alliteration of “verbal viper” and “voracious appetite” creates a rhythmic coil of menace and desire, as if the speaker’s confronting a charmer who cloaks cunning beneath sweetness. The image of truth dangling just out of reach—“suspending the obvious”—gives this a wicked elegance.
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, PAR. So glad you connected with the write my friend. The words you used to describe this piece in your eyes was amazing, brother. That means so much to me, thank you so much. Appreciate you.
Damian
Your writing has only improved with time, Damian. Your struggle with the ending paid off in a victorious way.
Great poem/
And ty for your comments, they’re much appreciated.
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Tim. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’m glad you think that, brother. It really means a lot to me. Good to see you back, not a problem, big fan of your work. Appreciate you.
Damian