You had a full poem and you broke it up to have omitted pieces. Interesting concept

An ocean that no one would dare to sail. An ocean of my own tears. Well that is something. I like this;))

What a beautiful concept. It’s funny how often we sink under the weight of our pain. To think of tears as an ocean of our own making and subject to our own belief is beautiful

Beautifully penned, Brandon. I concur with Fia and Willow. Another excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

The last line lands in a way that makes you want to reread this again, and let it linger. This caught my breath.

This reads almost like an invocation, a chant of summoning. Much enjoyed this. As Brandon said, it invites rereading 🧡

Powerfully penned, Brenda. Excellent write with dark undertones my friend. I concur with Willow and Brandon. Amazing read. Appreciate you.

Damian

oh wow beautiful Indie this hurts…I have such illusions and I still hold onto them even when proven wrong by others hugs great write ❤️

That ending is like a gut punch. Lovely write.

I remember writing once “images of you and me never equal any semblance of we.” This caught my breath and took me back to that moment. I agree with Fia, those last lines are powerful and painful.

“OUCH”. Agree with those above, it is a very powerful write and painful to read and know it happens far too often. -Curt

Powerfully penned, Indie. Excellent write with lots of layers my friend. That ending was painful indeed. Appreciate you.

Damian

Traumatic
Hard to recognize when they sell you out.

Keep punching Indie ..

The pain of knowing betrayal. It’s shattering. Thank you for sharing your poem.