Well damn this is intense and written with passion. The ending gave it softness and tenderness. loved it

This is incredible, my friend. Written with emotions, that could light a match…smoking a cigarette.

Chère PG.,
Hope this finds you well?!

What a gentle ending you’ve made of this.

And what a lovely piece of work!
Kind regards, Gus

Powerfully penned, PG. Excellent write my friend. I always dig the layers in your work, fantastic storytelling, tied together with the conclusion of being in a better state of being by the end. Nicely done per usual, I’m a fan. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thank god he came … or we would all have been fucked … nicely done

Passionately penned, Betty. Excellent write with lots of layers my friend. Crisp imagery as well. Appreciate you.

Damian

You’re waiting for the story to end. Oh my, this story is hot, it should not end.

It sizzles with a touch of noir in one’s skivvies! I like it, Betty.

Most erotica is as sexy as cold vomit, cliche and only appreciated by the sleaze pigs. You have this remarkable ability to reach inside the male mind and to deconstruct feral desires. It’s not something which usually moves me, but between my ankles and hips, your words always leave a tattoo. Great scribbling Boo.

You may not remember the fake Satanic Slut fake profile on DU? It was actually a gay male friend of mine. So outlandish and utterly bizarre, it was blatantly obvious a fake. And yet his inbox was awash with dribbling males. There’s another similar. Is there a moral to that? Probably just be aware of sad little men.

Rob x

Well, seems like you had a rough morning. Not!
As Ghosteen said, most adult poetry/prose is simply amateur porn. It takes an actual thought process to make it appealing. We use our brains too, when we have sex of any kind. So when someone can step it up to being something relatable, achievable even, for us all, then that means its good writing. So bravo to ya, for making it real for the reader.

Thank you my brother. The brain is the biggest sex organ, and I love that you pointed that out.

Thank you for the commentary. I absolutely adore you, and your opinion always matters.

Oh my. Oh my my my! Well hello Betty!
This was quite the experience to read! That sweet spot of a dream and feeling completely immersed.
Having those fantasies or dreams gets the heart going amiga. This takes vivid cardio exercise to another level.
I felt the frustration of the alarm. Noooooo!

And I love that bright smile of yours- after reading this I see why! Hahaha. No one does this better than you!

I’m so happy to see ya posted:)

Oh those 9 minutes of the snooze button…
So I almost read this while at work but upon reading the title, I opted to come back at a later time and I’m glad I did (I can’t risk people walking up behind me while read this kind of work, clutching my pearls).
Amazing. It’s every man’s fantasy and daydream, the peak of sexuality and longing wrapped up in such a hot scenario.
Now I should go for a run to get my heart going again.

Wally, that would have been a disaster! I’m glad you avoided the pearl clutching my friend.
You know I’m pro run for everything. So run your ASS off! Glad to have helped with your cardio, sweet friend.

Powerfully penned, Fia. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.

Damian

hello beautiful Fia this is perfectly written and it’s true older women no more how to please a man I like an older man myself combined with a little arrogance great write ❤️

Love the flow first. but also the attitude of claiming what’s yours. Tight

This is honest, real and demanding. Well said Fia.

That flow and to the point understanding hit straight on

I love this one, Fia.

This is raw possession and feral confidence on the page—jealousy sharpened into language instead of apology.
It’s confrontational without flinching, and the voice knows exactly how far to lean into menace before it becomes theater.

I’m digging the attitude and confidence. Telling it like it is in your own sense of style.
Back off my man! This is fun to read and had a swag urban feel to it.
Loved it !

That’s tellen her. When Fia lays down the law, watch out! lol Nice one. 🙂

“There’s something that comes with age and time” there is something about this line that speaks with stoicism and control which also lets a little leeway to catch a case.
I loved the underlying theme, she may try tempt him but you have his heart.
Great work

This is a subtle warning huh. LOL.
You make it seem “nice” because it rhymes. But so does “sharp” and “harp” -which is what they will be playing when you finish them off. LOL.
Great little ditty, with some real smoke!