the ballerina and the ragdoll comparison to women was written beautifully. Always on the tip toes but at times need a wall to lean against to keep you up right.

Hello Fia!
I think some men take it for granted that women are human. Really. My using ragdoll had a purpose, in that it does indeed mean a collapse.
Thank you, too, for the feedback.

hello dearest Styxian I love how you talked about her hanging on every word and vowel… so rich is your languag you can’t help but lift her this is beautifully poignant ❤️

I have a tendency to watch their lips, when someone is talking to me. It helps me understand them better. But, in this write it has more of a sensual purpose, obviously!
Thank you Crims. I’m still trying to post some decent stuff, so thanks for letting me know it’s not bad.

Hahaha, we’re getting a blend of soft core and hard core beautifully woven within this piece. We love the way that you flipped things showing your versatility and still kept it clean. Tight

Passionately penned, Mark. This is an excellent write full of deep wonderful layers my friend. Always enjoy your storytelling my brother. Another amazing read. Appreciate you.

Damian

Damn…the ragdoll analogy just knocked me on my ass. Some of us feel more ragdoll than ballerina all the time, and never a Barbie. I will say, as a girl who loved dolls, ragdolls are more resilient though, Barbies break easily. I love the quiet messages whispering through this

There’s a level of intimacy conveyed with compassion and understanding
that effortlessly flows through your poetic verbiage, speaking to the human condition
like none other. Standing ovation all around

Much respect

Naaj

I agree with Willow.
Ragdolls are more resilient. They might get scuffed up and look weathered over time but they are still together. Even if by some chance they do get torn apart, they can be sewn back together with new material or a different color of string. And maybe they can sew it themselves and choose a variety of colors or patterns we’ve always dreamed of.

Love this piece!

Although when I was little I did get the Barbie car!! Haha

Awesome comment, H. And hey, good to see you onsite!
I edited the write a tiny bit. I took out where it said “still” in the lines where it mentioned ballerinas, etc. Because for many, it never comes to fruition, it stays just thoughts. I myself am a clutz. And I’m sure there ae more like me. LOL.
Your presence is a blessing.

and the ground shook beneath me as I danced too!!

Absolutely felt this with everything inside me🤍

I was the kid who made “Weird Barbies”, complete with permanent marker makeup…

But anyway, your poem — gosh I love your writing. You seem to have a way of really seeing people, and all the various dancing, flopping dolls that they are in their heads. What a gift. And well… the subtle erotica… what a lovely addition. Three cheers!

❤️k

I felt this all the way… nice poem

Passionately penned, S. Excellent write with precise imagery my friend. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

A sensual masterpiece of mesmerizing sensuality. Just loved this my friend. You really lit the midnight torches for me here.

John

You never know when your journey is truly going to begin. this is so poignant. This stanza right there is so perfectly said.
“And maybe that’s the point of all of it,
that a life can be shaped by fire and loss
and still arrive at something gentle.
Something steady. Something meant.”

We took the long way! Over this mountain, across the bridge. So many detours to finally arrive at the same destination.
A writing site because we had something to share about our journey. On-site and off. We were both going through it!
Changing directions at the same time at the same exact moment. Our writing hands literally bumped into each other.
They were our cars filled with ink instead of gas. It was Serendipitous! I know Serendipity is one of your favorite movies! lol
We are fortunate baby. Timing is everything!
You are my happy place, always will be.

And the poem is beautiful!

Thanks Damian. Sometimes when Del asks about my past, although I am truthful, I wonder if this will be a make or break moment. I’ve had some doozies! But, just before I “met” her on DUP, I was going through a lot of mental evaluating, etc.
Finding a writing site like that helped calm me and kept me from running the streets, so to speak. A refocus, perhaps.
And yes, she is literally perfect for what I was lacking in my life. A true companion that checks all the boxes.

I thank you very much for that, Willow. I’ve finally allowed myself to listen to the wise voice in my head! I think my “growing” phase was maturity taking effect more solid. Better choices, etc.
Your part about your sweetie and your reply is awesome. I have made a ton of mistakes, yet that path has gotten me here. So, who knows, yaknow? At least I am wiser than then.
Your comment is cool!

Thank you, Thomas. I hacked at this write for a few days, even. Trying to convey the closest to exact message that I could. No metaphors, no mystery. Just pure appreciation.

It takes wisdom just to write this. I’ve looked back at people I associated with for decades and ask myself why? I was used and spit out but kept going back. More than likely because I just wanted friends. Now I’m wiser, but what a bunch of crap I’ve gone through to get my brain in the right place.

Great poem and one I can identify with. It’s often we tend to think we’re the only ones who’ve gone through crap until we read what others are thinking. It’s good we chose poetry to express ourselves.

How have you been, Tim?
Like most, and as you mentioned for yourself, I’ve been through some crap. And, a lot was self induced. As time goes by, excuses get lamer. It was time to get my act together, for good. The timing of things just worked out, too.
I truly appreciate seeing you here, and on the site as a whole.

Styx, you’ve got a little Barry White in you dude. Someone once asked is it the journey or the destination, seems your trip to the moon discovered more than just cheese. Tight

I love Barry White! That man can melt any woman’s steel heart! And other stuff. LOL
Thanks ME. I’m still trying to post some decent material, so it’s always good to know if it works or not.

So much insight here. The words are very lived in with layers upon layers. And the end result is very well earned. A wonderful read full of human truth.

Thank you much, Brandon. I was aiming to write something as a tribute, yet also insightful on a personal note. It took a bit of hacking to be satisfied with the end result!

“..-Everything I’ve survived
and everything I still hope to be.”!!
A heart-touching, insightful poem. Well done!