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Chère C.,
Yes, heartfelt (says Damian), and I won’t disagree.
I sincerely hope that you’ll encounter things that makes your heart stay.
You deserve it!
Love your writes.
Warm regards, Gus
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Read MoreMy body is a sunken mausoleum. Within is a ghostly spirit who's restless. Sunken as my once youthful plump cheeks. Within is a reticent tongue that lashes no more. Youthful blushes replaced by the cold purple of twilight. The twilight...
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Life has taken all the youth from you. Sad piece. But done well
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This is a touching dark and sad, but as always beautifully written piece, dear Daniel!
To me, wrinkles are first of all a sign of a life that has been lived. Shared joy and enthusiasm, and the hardships which came with new opportunities to grow, as well.-
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As always, vielen dank! I’m still young but I feel sad and alone. Writing is my only way to vent now.
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Read MoreI was wandering through a forest of skeletal trees and the misty vagueness of life when the flamelight of the candle in my hand was overmatched by the dawning sun that has illuminated a once dark world. As if my heart's compass...
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Here is the Eye’s Open sonnet. Thank you, Richard, for helping me understand the nuances of a sonnet
Was born with eyes wide-open on that day,
to be prepared for seeing every truth …
not wanting to offend in any way,
for what had happened up there on the roof.While holding onto pasts, like in a box …
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Nice
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Beautifully rendered, Fia
You make sharing and teaching a distinct pleasure.
Thank you for always joining-in and inspiring us! ⁓ Richard-
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Thank you
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“KLINK!”
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Read MoreWas born with eyes wide-open on that day,to be prepared for seeing every truth …not wanting to offend in any way,for what had happened up there on the roof. While holding onto pasts, like in a box …we crawled, we...
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Nice to see the structured discipline.
Cathartic work.-
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Thank you, Jim;))
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Now this is what I call perfect poetry
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Thank you, Sam:))
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Thank you so much for the compliment. I enjoyed the processes and your guidance.
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Anytime, Fia,
The pleasure of sharing with You is a true blessing! ⁓ Richard🖌
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Should have been: “V2, L2&4”
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Goodness-ME, Fia!🍷
I’m amazed at how well you’ve done with your first effort at writing a Sonnet … it just goes to show the wonders waiting to be unlocked and freed under the surface of one’s bountiful potential.
This is no small accomplishment, and one you should be exceedingly proud of, as only a rare few of all poetesses and poets can compose a correct Sonnet. The Sonnet form is known as the Rolls Royce of poetry, and due to its “iambic pentameter” requirement many give-up before ever mastering its beautifully rhythmical unstressedSTRESSED meter.
How exemplary your natural creativity fits so smoothly into the diction and syntax of each line, and how perfectly your lines enjamb and break. Emotion, metaphor, imagery, grammar, spot-on rhymes (except, V2, L3&4, but it’s near-rhyme and can be addressed anytime) … also, your all around theme and ambiance are held faithfully throughout.
Poignantly sad, you convey a tale so many can relate to in so many ways … you’re an amazingly original poetess, Fia, with a broad potential to master the art of poetry few possess.
Thank you for sharing your lovely potic skills, to inspire us all at the “Back to Poetry Basics” group.
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Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent sonnet my friend, you can do anything you put your mind to cuz. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you needed help with this, but it came out good;))
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Tremendous work.
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Powerfully penned, Brenda. A very heartfelt write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian