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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
bi-trillets attempt. this one wasn’t easy for me…never do well when rhymin is involved.
endless night confession
breathe in the black smoke, love feels like a joke
the nights we wasted tasted strange
cheap liquor kiss, dirty exchangeyou were my worst itch, struck like a kill switch
old barroom lungs in borrowed light
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I wonder if we are readin the same poem. I really expected this one to get marked up with a red pen on all the places I went wrong. I appreciate your input and the lessons you’re providin. I’ll agree with you on fixin the rhyme so I’ll add the s to pain. but you’re gonna have to pry my lowercase letters and lack of punctuation from my cold dead ha…Read More
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Ha-hahhhh!
That’s a given, M’Friend, but I’ll never give-up on ya. 🤓
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Bravo, Fia. You know how to tell a story my friend. This is really good, can’t wait to hear more. Take a bow!! Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Thank you Damian 😊 working on the next part
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Never hearing your voice before, Fia 👀👂
I did not know what to expect, but I can’t say I’m disappointed in any way … actually, I was quite taken with how smoothly soft ‘n sultry, creamy ‘n smooth it is, as though my mind was being caressed through my ears on a warm, gentle breeze by a hundred dandelion flowers.
I heard no reason for the “Adult” sticker … YET, anyway. Now, at least, I’m prepared for any sweetly naughty surprise one might hope for!. ; p
Anyone ever tell you you’re a VERY talented lady?
YEP! That’s my outlook! ⁓ Richard🖌-
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Thank you, Richard. I put the adult sticker because I figured I might as well start from the beginning. lol
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Hmmm?
Gonna keep us hangin’ in suspense, eh?-
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Working on it. Had a head cold. I Sound nasally
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Ohhh, NO, Fia!
Don’t tell me you normally sound like Betty Boop? 🙄
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Amazing! You’re a talent!
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Read MoreFirst time I got laid,I was fifteen.Kim.Black hair and big breasts.I just knew I was in love.She fucked every one of my friends.My heart felt like it was hit by a truck.I wandered lonelyas the neon night. I wanted to...
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Aww its funny how one remembers their first time. This is well written
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Thank you.
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Powerfully penned, Thomas. The pain of a broken heart can often lead one into the arms of alcohol. It promises the world only to consume its host. Excellent write my friend, I can relate. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, my friend.
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Those first moments of heartbreak are all consuming. I still remember mine like yesterday too…
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Yes, vivid and sharp. Thank you.
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Read MoreCandles possess souls that flicker against the icy winds of a wintry life. Candles in the snow… Beneath the pale shroud… Candles glowing in the darkness. Their breaths of heaven melt the snow into the holy water I cross myself with.
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Secret Ride (magic of Poetic Voice)
He came at night,
On a wind of heat.
A bead of sweat,
On lips so sweet.
“Come with me”
He whispered close.
They are all asleep,
Said, my sexy host.
I crawled out of bed.
On crumpled sheets.
A teddy that cling,
To my heat.
Just be quiet.
It will be fun.
No one will know,
Not even one.
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Ahhh, Fia
I so love and enjoy the fun of how you’ve used your amazingly gifted poetic voice to blend the vibrant colors, hues, and textures of your deliciously delightful diction to paint word pictures into our joy-filled imaginations, in such ways it all comes to life.
Your short lines build a quick cadence, and with spot-on line-bnreaks, r…Read More
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Thank you 😊
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Beautifully penned, Fia. Appreciate you, cuz.
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Thank you Damian
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A brilliant submittal, Syr Dru
Congratulations on another successfully excellent effort in displaying such admirable skill in the true essence and grasp of that which is conveyed in these earnestly shared teaching sessions.
Your poetic potential is second to none … this piece is spot-on in every sense of the phrase: meter, poetic voice, i…Read More