Powerfully penned, HJ. Excellent storytelling and crisp imagery my friend. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

OH MY FUCKING GOD YES! I have this in my word list — I keep a list on my phone notes of words that tingle: Schadenfreude, Bifurcate, Aposematic, Etiology… so the title drew me in.

And good goddamn you told the story in lyric. IT WAS SO GOOD.

This was a standout. This was the stanza that made me come back three times:
there’s a particular beauty
to watchin someone burn
inside their own bullshit
the way the smoke
keeps spellin their name
long after everythin else forgets it

THE WAY THE SMOKE KEEPS SPELLING THEIR NAME?! That is brilliant and I’m in love with the image.

Really well penned.

Betty

aprreciate you Damian. like when get to see what parts stood out.

Powerfully penned, Fia. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.

Damian

hello beautiful Fia this is perfectly written and it’s true older women no more how to please a man I like an older man myself combined with a little arrogance great write ❤️

Love the flow first. but also the attitude of claiming what’s yours. Tight

This is honest, real and demanding. Well said Fia.

That flow and to the point understanding hit straight on

I love this one, Fia.

This is raw possession and feral confidence on the page—jealousy sharpened into language instead of apology.
It’s confrontational without flinching, and the voice knows exactly how far to lean into menace before it becomes theater.

I’m digging the attitude and confidence. Telling it like it is in your own sense of style.
Back off my man! This is fun to read and had a swag urban feel to it.
Loved it !

That’s tellen her. When Fia lays down the law, watch out! lol Nice one. 🙂

“There’s something that comes with age and time” there is something about this line that speaks with stoicism and control which also lets a little leeway to catch a case.
I loved the underlying theme, she may try tempt him but you have his heart.
Great work

This is a subtle warning huh. LOL.
You make it seem “nice” because it rhymes. But so does “sharp” and “harp” -which is what they will be playing when you finish them off. LOL.
Great little ditty, with some real smoke!

This is dark and reminds me of something that could be a thriller movie

Hauntingly penned, Brenda. Excellent dark write my friend. Nicely done as always. Appreciate you.

Damian

Passionately penned, HJ. Excellent storytelling my friend, you have a way with words.. Appreciate you.

Damian

It’s crazy what runs through your mind while reading this, at first it was black widow/vampire, stalker/serial killer, and by the end we was thinking of a movie “Species.” This is a reader magnet, what is she and what will happen? Tight

You’ll just have to buy BEINGS to find out! I give away so much of my published writing here and on my website, and I seldom get time to write which I must do : BEINGS 2 or The Poignancy of Living. I greatly appreciate your reviews but have to warn everyone that I’m so busy with marketing and writing these days – my raisons d’etre – that I don’t have time to review you all!