Happy Birthday cuz. This is one of those poems that make you feel…sad while telling you the truth.

Happy birthday my dear pisces friend… a big hug!

First, I hope you had a fantastic and soul-filling birthday. I have read this one 3 times now. I finish, sigh, scroll back up and read it again. It sinks into the mental marrow and stirs thoughts. You are a master of layers, my friend. I’m glad this one bubbled out of the “not yet” vault. It needed sunlight and shadows on its bones

Congratulations Damian on finding these words & breathing fresh life into each one .. Oh’ and on your birthday too .. Neville 😎👍

Captivating and intriguing piece.

You’ve got me hooked from the start. I was drawn to this by its title.

Strong choice of words. Exquisite in its own way.

A bold and daring read. x

Damian this song on mortality and the grim reaper was one of your very best. The sheer lyrical strength was formidable here. I loved every roaring line. You really made this come alive for me. I am amazed.

John

“Built a foundation on a fault line” I think this is a just as good if not a more accurate description that old adage of built on quick sand, because with a fault line, at any minute of any day, a quake opens up and swallows things up quick.

Great work here Damian.

I said it before this is a beautiful conversation between the both of you

I saw there were a bunch of comments on his post, so I sauntered over to post mine on your post instead. Gotta spread the love evenly, ya know. This is a beautiful collaboration and I fully relate to the desert/oasis vibe. I once wrote a piece titled Shifting Sands for my sweetie. Maybe I’ll drop it here at some point too. It’s funny how a word or a phrase acts as a springboard and we’re off!

Thank you Crimsin:)
Mark and i have done a few collaborations but this one is extra special!
Have a wonderful Saturday!

Awwww. What an awesome comment.
Thank you for teaching me a new word!
That is exactly what Mark is for me!

Love like this doesn’t die—it just gets buried deep, waiting on stubborn hands to dig it back into daylight.
Your desert’s harsh, but the water’s still down there somewhere, whispering both your names.

Beautifully penned, Adel & Mark. What a lovely collaboration, really love the back and forth between you two, as in life and in love, your words also show your undeniable connection. Nicely done. Appreciate you both.

Damian

Hi H!
I love this comment. For me it’s important when writing to also acknowledge the inspiration behind it.
Mark inspires me all the time, so do other writers on this site.

I also wanted to find a different metaphor besides the sun chasing the moon.
There are other connections we can draw from to write.

Im so happy you stopped by for a comment:)
You are awesome!

Why thank you:)
When you get that eureka moment you gotta write it down before it vanishes!
I’m so happy you enjoyed our write.

Thanks for commenting!

You guys are like the dynamic duo of poetry, tight work Lady

This is so sweet and I love the back and forth. It worked well. You can see the conversation between the two of you. Very nice collaboration.

I love this:). Thanks for collaborating with me sweetie.

I also got to give a shout out to Crimsin since she inspired me to try something related to the desert:)

Beautifully penned, Mark & Adel. What a lovely collaboration, really love the back and forth between you two, as in life and in love, your words also show your undeniable connection. Nicely done. Appreciate you both.

Damian

Thank you, Damian. Her and I have a remarkable amount in common. And thankfully our creative writing is what ultimately got us together. That is a huge reward!

hello the both of you this is true love what it feels like what it looks like… so much passion time nor place can part just beautiful ❤️

You guys are like the dynamic duo of poetry, tight work dude

Oh, we are pretty dynamic in a few ways! Thanks though, because it was writing that got us together. It was the crazy humor that snagged us! LOL

The ebb and flow of this collab is beautifully harmonious!

It was hidden but it is nice that you found it to share again. “I’m not surprised to find the world rigged” is so true.

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Kay. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It is kinda of bittersweet, but as you said it’s never too late to start. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, NTD. So glad you connected with the write my friend. That it is.. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. One of my favorites verses as well, I can see how it does sound like voting. They are the only guarantee it seems, we’re even charged a fee to die. Always enjoy your commentary. Appreciate you.

Damian

This is deep. Glad you found it and posted. And while you’re right the world seems rigged, I don’t so much think it’s the world itself, but the humans pulling the strings.

Nicely written Damian

Such is the plight of us. Your words are a testament to that. At least you make a killer piece out of the dilemma.
Excellent crafting Damian. Tight meter and rhymes are a plus too.

Feels like a man staring down the rigged table and still sliding his last chip across just to see what happens.
You’ve got the grit to ask the ugly questions most folks bury under Tuesday morning coffee.

when molehills become mountains they just have to be climbed or written about .. You just done good sir .. very good indeed .. you wrote about the whole thing .. Neville 😎👍

This took me back into the lines of Shakespeare about the stages of life but told in your original way with the rhythm and blues melody that really cast the spell as I read with the dark magic you infuse into your poetry so masterfully, my friend.

John

You’ve spill so many universal truths in this piece Damian. Once we realize a lot of things a lot of time has gone by.
Excellent work sir.