Built a foundation on a fault line
Temperamental bias stirs beneath
No substance flows from the vine
Every shortcut is laced with grief
When the walls tumbled down
It revealed a foolish arrogance
Under that smile lives a frown
A string-puppet born to dance
Rain pours from a dark sky
Drowning every seed planted
Promises built around a lie
Broken wishes never granted
When death comes to collect
Silence before being withdrawn
Time is fading into disconnect
Wicked storms invading at dawn
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2024
I feel this one. Still, the happiest of birthdays to you.
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, NTD. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Thank you for the birthday wishes. Appreciate you.
Damian
hello dearest Damian sad but beautifully flowing sadness happy birthday ❤️
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Brenda. So glad you connected with the write my friend. The good thing about posting a day before my birthday, is I actually get to respond on my birthday. lol. Thank you for the birthday wishes. Appreciate you.
Damian
Happy Birthday cuz. This is one of those poems that make you feel…sad while telling you the truth.
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Thank you for the birthday wishes.. Appreciate you, cuz.
Happy birthday my dear pisces friend… a big hug!
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, PAR. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Thank you for the birthday day wishes. Actually, I’m a Triple Pisces.. A big hug back brother! Appreciate you.
Damian
First, I hope you had a fantastic and soul-filling birthday. I have read this one 3 times now. I finish, sigh, scroll back up and read it again. It sinks into the mental marrow and stirs thoughts. You are a master of layers, my friend. I’m glad this one bubbled out of the “not yet” vault. It needed sunlight and shadows on its bones
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was a good birthday overall, played some piano, talked to J.J. Burton, and spent time with the wife and kids. Thank you for the b-day wishes. I definitely write in layers, probably because everything I observe has layers, including myself and humans in general. I come by it naturally I guess. lol. The “not yet” section has tons of writes in it, although some need work or at the very least a tweak or two. Always enjoy your commentary my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
Congratulations Damian on finding these words & breathing fresh life into each one .. Oh’ and on your birthday too .. Neville 😎👍
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Neville. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I try.. Thanks for the b-day wishes kind Sir. Appreciate you.
Damian
Captivating and intriguing piece.
You’ve got me hooked from the start. I was drawn to this by its title.
Strong choice of words. Exquisite in its own way.
A bold and daring read. x
Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Rosie. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Thank you for your amazing commentary and support. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian this song on mortality and the grim reaper was one of your very best. The sheer lyrical strength was formidable here. I loved every roaring line. You really made this come alive for me. I am amazed.
John
Thank so much for reading and your kind words, John. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’m amazed after 35 summers of doing this writing thing I haven’t lost my love for the craft. I’ve had ups and downs sure, if I were to ever lose that love then I might have something to worry about. lol. Enjoyed your commentary. Appreciate you.
Damian