This is so sweet. Using the clouds to showcase the emotions, and the river steadily moving. Accepting whatever comes.

Beautifully penned, Rascal. An amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Beautifully said, Richard. This is a splendid mix of images and sentiments, much like sitting and listening to a soft song on the radio. 🙂

I always appreciate a good picture to go along with something, but honestly your words helped create the scene so perfectly that it wasn’t needed (not that I’m complaining, I’m a visual person after all).

I liked the personification of nature and comparing it to actual people, like personification taken to a whole new level I guess. This was calm and soothing but also deep and impactful.

Good morning, Mary 🌤

How keenly you’ve perceived the core essence of this rather abstractly metaphorical work … so few seem to … and, what inspiring satisfaction it is to receive your generous praise and expressed appreciation.

I’m sincerely grateful for your lovely words, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard🖌

The river, the rain, and evaporation–I like that idea. The evolution of weather and romance all rolled into one. Quite clever and poetic, Richard!

Absolutely gorgeous piece.

Even as I read it now after years, it’s still one of my favorites… I will always admire pieces that blend life, nature and love all together like You did so splendidly here, a poem that not only captures the heart with its beautiful imaginary, but also with the way it reaches the depth of emotions and how it hiddenly carries wisdom and emotively expressing the weakness of the human heart when it comes to love. that’s what we call, “a piece to remember”.

I’m a free verse kind of girl. I’ve always gravitated to it mostly because I feel it offers an introspective voice for what I want to say. I take long walks, mostly for photography purposes, and witnessing nature in all its glory. You should write more in this vein. I truly enjoyed this side of you!

There is the gentlest laid advice re morals and faith in your words, sir. ‘Go gentle into the night’ perhaps? Let silence be a friend as you slowly reach a state of being seen by what YOU long to see: accepted for what and who you are.

‘ I’m like the river,
soaking you in, feeding on you,
determined to face any challenge
to get back to the sea, – ‘

Ahhh, Lovely Em ✨

Welcome to Stars Rite … it’s such a pleasure to know you’ll be here to share with and enjoy at the click of a moment’s desire for excellent storytelling and poetic magick of your original mastery … we’re sooo lucky!

Just like the verse you’ve highlighted to express understanding me and my core intent, by virtue of your impeccable depths of perception in always grasping the true essences of my humble efforts, I am assured you’re still one of my all-time favorite writers and readers to share with.

Hugs, blessings, and most grateful thanks, Em! ⁓ Richard🖌

Good morning dear Richard,
Up early and chose your poem to read and ponder before I start my day with a “green drink” and capuchino…
When I read your work I am always swept away into a dream like place full of emotions. I “stand” by you captured in the moment. This one is full of layers and wonderful metaphors. The use of Earths treasures to explain your emotions add texture to those feelings. The end made me cry as I understand the feelings oh too well.
Your desire to get back to the sea where you are loved and happy makes complete sense to me.
Lisa

G’mornin’, SeaCat 🌤

Welcome to StarsRite, and thank you for reading and commenting on this rather metaphorically ambiguous piece.
I’m very pleased to know it “grabbed” you, and not too surprised it had you wondering at the same time.
One way to unravel any confusion about … which was River, and which was the “I”? … would be through this comment in L1 of the penultimate verse, “I’m LIKE the river”. Everything after that is sheer metaphor.

I do so excitedly await your follow-up read and comment.
May the rest of your day be sunny ‘n bright! ⁓ Richard🖌

Well, SeaCat ⚓

I am grateful beyond gratitude how you so smoothly slipped into my consciousness, leading me into rendering a much finer, refined rendition of this rather (overly?) involved piece.

Each critique you so graciously laid out has been embraced, sorted, and set into place, creating a far more enjoyable read for not only myself, but for those yet to come. Please, let me know if I’ve missed anything, or elsewise.

Yours, a rare and welcome review, indeed, of the sort every writer should be blessed to receive … a “real” constructive, highly-skilled lesson.

Most thrilled, thank you! ⁓ Richard🖌

Beautiful write… flows so smoothly… love the orphaned line at the end