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Damian DeadLove wrote a new post
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Read MoreCruel intentions sit behind blue eyes Nothing normal about feeling this way Crawling on paper skin bruised by lies Darkness waits to seize a summer day Sleepless nights filled with frustration Claustrophobic words shallow and thin Filtering through arrogant conversation Naked praise wears this suspicious grin Verbal...
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’m glad they work, they’re starting to grow on me. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Damn…you always take me somewhere with your poetry. This one is no exception. Give those last 2 lines their just dues. They’re fantastic, my friend
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’m all about taking journeys, and inviting others to tag along. I’m glad they work, it took effort to get them to flow right. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Raven. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mary. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Means a lot to me. Appreciate you.
Damian
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You’ve gotta give yourself more credit, Damian.
The last lines indeed suppressed my own voracious appetite. The last stanza is my favorite.
Nice spill my friend. xx
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, P.G. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Nice, to see you again. I was pretty confident till the end. lol. It took me awhile to get the flow right, I had went through so many ideas that were cool but wasn’t working right. So though these lines worked I wasn’t sure, but from all the support in the comments, I chose wisely. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
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That’s razor-sharp and sinuous—like a poem with fangs. The alliteration of “verbal viper” and “voracious appetite” creates a rhythmic coil of menace and desire, as if the speaker’s confronting a charmer who cloaks cunning beneath sweetness. The image of truth dangling just out of reach—“suspending the obvious”—gives this a wicked elegance.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, PAR. So glad you connected with the write my friend. The words you used to describe this piece in your eyes was amazing, brother. That means so much to me, thank you so much. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Your writing has only improved with time, Damian. Your struggle with the ending paid off in a victorious way.
Great poem/
And ty for your comments, they’re much appreciated.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Tim. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’m glad you think that, brother. It really means a lot to me. Good to see you back, not a problem, big fan of your work. Appreciate you.
Damian
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This is so incredibly scintillating. You write this succubus with the virtuosity of a poet who knows her craft and knows it well. I could feel this deep in my core. I was seduced and stimulated by your fiery sensual words.
John
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good evening dearest John you do me honor thank you most graciously my friend 💕
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Unapologetically penned, Brenda. This is raw passion unleashed my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian good evening thank you graciously I deeply appreciate your thoughts 💕
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hello beautiful poetess thank you most graciously good evening 💕
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This is an emotional tour de force of dark poetry my friend. You captivate me with this darkly lit poem. A real work of art.
John
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hello dearest John wow that’s a beautiful comment thank you graciously 💕
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Powerfully penned, Brenda. Great dark poetry my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian thank you graciously I deeply appreciate hearing from you… you make my day 💕
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Daniel Long wrote a new post
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Read MoreWhen you used to gaze into my eyes that was so beautiful... Then I could gaze back into those emerald gems... It wasn't the cute light of your soul, rather the beauty of your darkness... Since we broke up, my eyes still chase you through light...
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hello dearest Daniel this would make a great song…I’m sad I understand your darkness I have it myself I gave up long ago that the beings of light would except me… though in part I burn with the light… great write…💕
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Thanks as always, Brenda! Im still in the shadows gazing at her light… pretty lonely place…
Daniel
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I understand Daniel we are very different as you know… we can dream but never see her light better than yourself this is great beauty in the dark 💕
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Beautifully penned, Daniel. Love the depth of this write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Daniel Long wrote a new post
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Read MoreA scream of lightning and crash of thunder,illuminates the dark path ahead,and then I know the stormhad resuscitated my heart! But this storm ahead!Never have I seen suchgrey horizons for myself!Where the sun is faintin this fog of uncertainty. With trepidation...
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That is wonderful. I am totally here for it.
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Thanks, Fia. Im breezing through this new book. While juggling others haha. Soon I’ll be posting the first drafts…
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That is great.
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hello dearest Daniel beautifully dark I love a gothic atmosphere did you listen to my song grey day?💕
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No I have not. But I am going to definitely today. Can’t wait! I need to do audio on here too.
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Powerfully penned, Daniel. Another incredible write my friend, I believe you will succeed. Appreciate you.
Damian
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The last 2 lines are perfect for this. Nicely done