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    Dead Muse

    Dead MuseBy FlatDaddyMy baby's all black and blue and broken,  lying on the bed beneath me  inside me,Done in by ice  and eight years of morphine  that never ends the pain --  but dulls the mind  slays the will ...

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    • I feel the muse here is the dead one for eight years now.
      Painful loss…she is no longer inside him. Either she forced him into the drugs or he forced her out because of them.
      I think your poetry screams about the underside of life…the side many may not want to see because it mirrors them.
      The unwanted sides.
      This is really good, FD.
      j.

      • Thank you so much, J. All true, of course; however, in poetry, all readers can see only what they can interpret from their particular viewpoints, their own life experiences, and thus, their “interpretation” is valid only as possible truth, their truth — but actual truth can be diametrically opposite: The muse is the hero: eight years gone, killed by pain, and now, with the HELP of the morphine, is finally the resurrector. Then, of course, the morphine itself must be, and was, vanquished, and the man is back. For now, at least. In a situation like this, nothing is permanent. Try it from that viewpoint.

      • I already replied, but I keep getting a notification that takes me back to here. So I don’t know if you got what I replied last night, above this.

        • I sure did get it….the poem is universal when readers might get something different from the poem than what exactly inspired it.
          j.

          • I figured the notification number would change once the reply had been read and answered. Guess not. That’s confusing.

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    Rat Revelation

          There it was!There it was, right there in theAustin American Statesman,page E11, Sunday, April 9th, 1989:incontrovertible scientific proof!At first I thought it wasn't important,just another filler,relegated to deep burial on page E11 --and then the revelation swept...

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    • Now that is interesting. That tiny brain was in control all that time. So we have the same tiny brain and respond just the same way as a man would. Was that article in the Times? Nice read

      • See the 1st verse: Austin-American Statesman, April 9th, 1989. A real study. And boy, did I get a lot of flack from the “gentle sex.” Just reporting what I read — in my own words, of course. Isn’t that what good reporters do?

    • I was intrigued the whole time reading this.
      Informative and entertaining!
      With a side of “it wasn’t my fault”. Hahaha
      Enjoyed the read.

    • I’m glad you enjoyed it. It is a fun one to perform, though it’s been a good while since I have done that.

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    How to Get Elected

    How to Get ElectedBy FlatDaddyIt takes big bucks   cause the luck's with the clucks      with the cashhhh,         the stashhhh            of tucks in the pocket.That's the socket, the clock to...

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    • Very entertaining! I don’t trust politicians no matter who they are.

      • Ah, thank you! Did you play the audio? I need to redo it, but it’s not too bad.

        • I listened to the audio and it sounded great to me. Lots of rhythm.

          • Oh, good. I still need to fix it though (it’s missing a word I had to add after Trump took the throne, er, office.)

            • haha, well then get that word in flat daddy. One word might not make a difference unless it’s a real good one. 🙂

              • Oh, yes! The word is “nay” — it wasn’t in there before. I won’t tell you where (oh, boy, a treasure hunt!), but once you find it, you’ll understand why I had to add it. So now I must add it to the audio — which, of course, requires doing it again.

    • I wish you luck in your endeavor. 🙂

    • Super cool and fun poetic satire on the cash that floats our politicians. Buying elections with the telegenic looks and velvet tongue has been going on for a long time. Great poem.

      John

      • Ah, yes, and I find it strange for that very reason that I did not go into politics myself; it’s too bad my mirror does not agree. Damn lying glassy two-dimensional things that populate every bathroom I’ve ever been in. Who put those damn things there? Certainly not me! Thanks for the nice comments, John.

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    dark faith

    inside I crash into your energysmashing, cunted brillianceshining danger I can't resistinfidelity of the soulmy honesty is invaded by your darknessit seeps into my sorrowyour marred imageit makes me flinch what you call goodmiserable truth I hate the feelingof...

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    • Beautifully penned, Brenda. Love the depth and layers in this write my friend. Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • thank you graciously dearest Damian forgive my late response I find myself slipping of as of late ❤️

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    Forest Pulse

    I wandered through a forest,sunlight pouring through the canopy like molten gold,shadows drifting over moss-carpeted ground.​Ferns unfurled like emerald flames,flowers opened in silent bursts of color,a single pulse in time with the wind​A stream whispered over smooth stones,its silver...

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    • Reading this, I thought of the pulse of an olive whispering to the pimento.

      • Wow, I absolutely love that thought! The pulse of an olive whispering to the pimento is such a quiet, perfect echo of the magic in the poem. Thank you!

          • Hi Adagio. I like the thought of an olive whispering to a pimento, but I think for now, I’m going to let Forest Pulse stand on its own. It was born from a vivid, complete dream vision, and I feel like the poem already captures all the magic that spoke to me in that moment. Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment

    • Your words are so enticing and enchanting. This splays me into a midnight forest walk and feeling the breath of moonlight as tattoo. Exquisite.

    • I absolutely love the image of “feeling the breath of moonlight as a tattoo.” That’s such a striking, exquisite way to describe that feeling of deep connection. Thank you, Rob. I appreciate your thoughts.

    • Beautifully done, Romaj. Each line sings and comes to life through the images you describe.

      Favorite line
      Ferns unfurled like emerald flames,

      • Tim, ​Thank you! I’m really delighted to hear that the imagery resonated with you and made the forest feel alive.

        I especially appreciate you pointing out the line about the ferns. The emerald was so stunning and vivid in the dream, and it’s a huge relief to know I managed to capture that vision with words.

    • Beautifully penned, Roma. Excellent write my friend, with such colorful imagery. You know how to paint a picture with your words. Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • Thanks for reading, Damian! I’m so glad the colorful imagery resonated with you. That feeling of the forest coming alive was exactly what I hoped to capture. Appreciate you taking the time to read and comment

    • I love reading poems like this. Full of vivid color and storytelling. I’m a huge fan of anime. The good stuff.
      I love how it plays with your mind and brings dream alive. Truly enjoyed the read:)

      • Hi Adelphina. Thank you so much! I really appreciate you saying that. Since the poem actually came from a dream, I was trying to capture that feeling of a vivid, hyper-real vision. I can absolutely see the connection to anime. It has that ability to make color and dreams feel so alive! I’m glad you enjoyed the read.

    • Such marvelous detail in your wording & delivery. Nicely said.

      • I’m so glad you enjoyed the wording…that means a lot. Thanks for reading and sharing your feedback!

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