I like the rhyming scheme and the poem.

great flow and subject matter very beautiful ❤️

Hello, Her. You nailed it, my child-self was indeed a’visiting. It brings me true joy to know this poem was helpful for you!

You may borrow my rose-tinted glasses anytime.
Clay

Carefree, peaceful, a joyous, tranquil vibe. Nice work.

Powerfully penned, Brenda. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thia is a deeply moving poem, Crimsin. I felt especially those last 3 line. And the music made the poem more real to me, more tragic. To desire death, yet condemned to life, where only sadness can be found. And yet, there is also the deeply felt desire to be “understood”. Crimsin, you may not want anyone in your “onyx tower”, but your poem calls to us nonetheless. Is this not an invitation to at least feel your words?

You write powerfully, Crimsin.

Curt

hello dearest Curt of course it is I hope to move always that you got it makes me happy thank you ❤️

This is why we don’t listen to music while writing, tight

I often will be going through my day and I hear myself respond internally to something and then hear another voice internally sounds like me but it’s not this is interesting ❤️

<3

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I sure hope this is fiction! Fat or not, this guy is a sad excuse for a man. I’ve never understood why some men treat their wives so terrible. A mistake I’ve seen in my life is that of assuming the children of a bad person will be bad, too.