Introspective write, Daniel. Very powerful spill my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

I admire the ease with which you express your inner world. Stoic, melancholy, honest and beautiful write. You are there in every word, thank you for the share!

Okay, that is gut-wrenching. To lay there and live a slow death that you did not sign up for. Not right at all.
This is executed well

Thanks for the thoughtful comment Fia.

It’s not right and it’s not wrong , it’s just the way it is.Like everything in life,even suffering is impermanent.

🙏

Quite moving..thank you for sharing

I’ve often felt that pain is preferable to apathy. That quiet passing out of space. This haunts & hurts. So often the case, & always hard

First the Technical: Excellent consistency with meter, beautifully executed rhyme.
Composition: Incredible depth. As Willow noted, the piece reflects a falling away, a loss of touch and intimacy with no explanation. It’s a death of sorts, and you’ve painted it perfectly. Really well done.

Great write Fia.

I think we’d agree we aren’t our bodies.
Somewhere in the spaces between our cells , our atoms, is our consciousness…but that’s not us either.
We cling to our notion of self but really are non self.Nothing.

Phenomenally penned, Fia. This was a powerful write my friend, I think our soul is our mind. It makes sense to me anyways. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thank you, Keith 😊

I hope you didn’t drink the entire bottle.
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Beautifully penned, P.G. Love the flow and wordplay my friend. Used to like Tequila, even better was Mezcal. Of course those days are long gone, I wasn’t able to do moderation very well. Anyways a great write. Appreciate you.

Damian

There is so much to unpack here: the not-quite-healthy relationship that just feels so good, too good. The conflicting knowledge that you seem all too aware of: /My head is telling me to drink more, my liver screams “GET IT TOGETHER!”/ Been there, done that too many times. Vodka was my liquor of choice, and Stoli was my dear friend (along with Camels) for a good while many years ago. The fact that the knowledge is there speaks volumes to you as a person. Excellent write! <3 Echo

This provoked a giggle or two!

Cleverly penned, DK. Can’t go wrong sex and automotive speak. You’ll definitely attract the gear heads with this one. All you need is loud guitars screaming out the speakers. lol. Liked this a lot my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Yeah, great flow! It feels like summer, wind playing with your hair and lots of weird thoughts on your mind! Great piece!

Haha I loved this Meg! Flow especially. “Ball bearings deep” love it!

Lemme at your Heme ….
Code for ass deep

BIG STICK SHIFT …..LIKE

You don’t need a ticket, baby. Just get in your jeep and drive down here. I’ll put on my shortest denims for you…

xoxo

Tongue in your tailpipe…

xoxo

I’ll wash you down after I take them off.