Superb

Love your spacing… very effective emphasis. Second person narrative is such a powerful literary POV, and you’ve taken full advantage. The conversational tone reflects the overwhelming effort to maintain control. The piece is as much about self as it is situational management, and I think the limited information provided makes it all the more relatable.

Thank you, Wil;))l

Powerfully penned, Fia. There is venom in those words my friend. Incredible write. Appreciate you.

Damian

Heavy! Like this a lot.

This is incredibly raw and honest. The way you describe the tears as rage, not sorrow, feels so real. Thank you for sharing this.

I don’t want to be wiping away your smile, girl.
Thanks for checking this out

Different face, different smile from Adira but same effect.
There’s a few ladies on this site that I’d crawl naked over cut glass just to spend some time with….your one of them.

Dark and engaging . Nice spill

Powerfully penned, DK. This is an incredible write with stellar imagery my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Outstanding. The wording, the image and the sincerity in detail makes this a marvelous piece of writing.

You are too sweet, girl!

Deeply felt. Tragic yet majestic at the same time

Much respect

Naaj

I lost a little brother….🙏

So, this one hits especially close to home, Meg.
Beautifully rendered Free Verse, with all the poetic attributes that make this form so expressively powerful to read and vividly sink one’s mind, heart, emotions, and soul into.

No one speaks with a poetic voice like yours!
Thank you ever-so warmly for YOU! ⁓ Richard🖌

You’re a wonderful person, Meg. And an outstanding writer. I love your stories and poetry. Expert at writing erotica and by your picture you’re gorgeous. I don’t judge nor would I here. Sorry, I saw this post had no comments and you spilled alot out. Keep doing what you’re doing, Meg.

Danny boy

You write your feelings at that moment so well that I can feel as if I am in your place.

A 10 minute story that held my interest. Not many can do that. You DK always create some marvelous story with explosive detail and imagery. Noting short of being a classic write. Your a talent and know how to stir a man or a woman’s imagination. xxx.

Excellent work. You bring it to life. Tremendous work. Stay hard at it. I appreciate you.

Meg, you take me along with you into the scene as I read. It is as if I were there seeing it all, hiding in a corner. Truly exquisite prose artist you are. Your narrative grips me as I read. I can feel it all through your crystal clear writing. You are truly talented. I am a really enjoying these. The ending here has me on the edge of my seat. I can’t wait t read more of this story.

John

Cleverly penned, Blue. Great write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Go back and edit at the last two lines. There’s a space in the word “shoe”.

We always wonder if past lovers think about us… it’s a natural thing. Particularly at the grocery. And for all you guys out there that fucked me… yes, I remember you – particularly in produce when I’m looking through the cucumbers.

Seriously, Blue – I can relate. Now put your shoes in the dryer and go back for that check out boy.

The metaphor of the shoe in the washing machine certainly heightens the auditory senses in the overall underlying anxiousness.
Great work Blue.

Powerfully penned, Blue. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Or… the dude could have been a serial killer, and you missed out on a painful death. If Ted Bundy had been wandering around my campus when I was in school, just damn. I’d have jumped on that Volkswagen gearshift in a heartbeat.

I get you, though. Missed opportunity. It’s tough when you’re a girl. Guys think you’re being too assertive, but they always miss the signals.

Like Damian stated, I also found this powerful. Not everyone can make it to the summit for whatever reasons, but your analogy here is strong.
Nicely penned.