Sounds rough and sad to me at the same time.

Well now, Benjamin 🍷

Here, in this gobsmacking piece, is the exact point of issue I was making when you mentioned being “an undisciplined Free Verse poet” … there’s nothing about this poem but an excellent use of skillful poetic devices to command the reader to halt, proceed, imagine, and “feel” every moment, twist, turn, and diversion into your wondrously rendered world of abstract, mind-bending ambiguation, and I say this while sitting here bulge-eyed and jaw-dropped, not only from your phantasmagorical diction of verbosity, but how you’ve used white-space to create mood and imagery, while capturing and holding your readers’ spellbound attention.

Sheesh, M’Friend, it’ll take awhile to shake this one from my consciousness!
Good, really GOOD stuff, Syr Poet! Thanks for the rare experience! ⁓ Richard🖌

I feel this piece. Nice

I hear that man. Cool write.

What would Paula do with $10k….DM me.
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Hmmmm? Hire someone to cook out at the local park and give away the food. Replace my bed and sofa. Buy curtains. New teeth. New shoes and clothes. All gone.

Hoi hoi Paula,
Like this one a lot.

I know for a fact that some sorts of giving makes me richer.
And practicing it for a very very long time.

Keep them (the poems) coming please?
Kind regards, Gus

Omg that little..shit. She lived and he dies and the whole family destroyed because of a kiss that was never going to happen. Wickedly good story

Thanks Fia.

Guys have been getting hurt for centuries over women in some way or another. :/

Paula this is a masterfully written poem. it had me riveted to read what happened next. Suspenseful with lots of surprises. You really engage the reader. Am very impressed.

John