Hauntingly beautiful! The well chosen imagery succeeds in creating a cold and hurting atmosphere with words that cut like ice shards. Great job here!

Very nice structure and flow, holly shitt ur good

This one bleeds ink and teeth—raw, unashamed of its own hunger and haunt.
You don’t pretty up the blues here; you bite down on them and grin through the bruise.

Thank you, Thomas.

Hi Atticus,
I’m with Thomas W. case. His comment being a poem in itself.

Yours is almost an abstract landscape of lust. Love it a lot.
Kind regards, Gus

Your poem shines in raw, haunting and intense beauty,. You’re a master of metaphors, my friend!

Thank you, Elke.

spurting, telling x

Thank you, Jacqui.

Thank you very much for being your collaboration partner, dear Atticus! It wasn’t only a very inspiring dialogue, it was also a lot of fun!

I love collabs my friend, it was you that made it better,

Whew, chilling. The mind reacting to itself. Creative way to explore the tension between control and chaos, intimacy and decay. I’ve never been much of an introspective writer; at least I’ve never sat down and said I’m going to write in that way. And while your piece is indirectly introspective, given the abstract images, it does make me think. its the way you show a mind caught in strange, looping thoughts while trying to make meaning of overwhelming feelings. Anyway i’m rambling, this was short and sweet.