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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
for sake of the lesson I added punctuation…don’t get attached.
gravity slip
I stumble thru a world
that’s bent slightly outa focus
as if it were half dream,
half burn.
heat risin off my skin in waves
like quiet embers tryin
to decide if I’m worth ignitin.every breath feels wrong,
every step lands heavy,
gravity clawin up my s…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
This is my Free verse
Do you hear the sun?
As the rays beat down on the ground,
It is subtle but poignant
It’s purpose is to burn.
The exquisite heat,
does not match the coolness in your eyesDo you smell the wind?
Multicolored in its complexity
Surrounds you,
Invades your very core.
It gives you life.
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Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poem’s captive spell.
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I’ll work on it. Thanks for the guidance
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You make sharing a distinct pleasure. 🙏
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Read MoreEvery time I write a lineI take some more spaceI create a limbA jawI am hollowAnd fainted in real worldI create myselfOnly in poetry.
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beautifully said truth ❤️
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Thank you.
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Beautifully penned, Amethyste. So much power you pack in this short form. Sometimes less is more, excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Nice to talk to you my friend.
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Read MoreLove Sonnet LXVIII If I wrote you a poem, would you hear me? Would you read me, swallow my metaphors, kiss my similes into oblivion? I only have words to offer, words filled with allegories, stories of how the moon holds my haiku, hoping to be next...
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hello dearest poet this is so beautifully written brimming with feeling and the gift of writer ❤️
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Crimsin, thank you for your kind words on this poem. I am happy you found the ‘beauty’ and ‘feelings’.
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“…splashing alliteration on the pages of your heart.” My, my, how poetically defined! I love your sonnets. What a gift you have of writing them!
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Hi Kelly, you know I always love when I see you commenting on one of my poems. Thank you for ‘splashing’ some words on my poem.
As you can see, this is sonnet number 68, only 32 more to go. Then I will publish them as a tribute to Pablo Neruda.
I hope you are doing well. I must get over to WC soon and see if you posted some more poems there.
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Your love Sonnets are like flowers… each has its own sweet scent, beauty and allure. This is gorgeous.
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Sheer brilliance, Syr 253
You’ve mastered the heatbeat techniques of Free Verse poetry: Imagery, deeply gripping emotion, metaphor, spot-on line-breaks, seamless enjambment, syntax; and, except for the distraction of missing “g’s”, your diction and spellbinding flow would be irresistibly captivating to the senses.
Also, your well-placed…Read More