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    Pandora's Latch

    She was made beautiful,superficially flawless,impenetrable perhaps.Heaven sent, yet I knewall lofty things crashfrom the weight of conscience.The gods gave her a jarpristine, ornate even thoughof human influences.She kept it close, intimately hers-Had vowed not to open itif she hoped...

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    • This form of poetry is so entrancing. “That some boundaries are crossed by desire.” Feel that.

      • Thanks Fia. I read up on the story a couple of times, and was contemplating adding more gods names dropped in it. But nah, I decided to keep it mostly intimate between the two. The idea was to keep it symbolic, erotic, but not to cross the obvious language of the obvious. lol.

    • There is so much power in this write!
      Each line conjures such intense emotional pull. Like magnets colliding!
      You’r waiting for an explosion 💥 that feels exquisite. You had me at the edge of my seat reading this. Hahah.
      Phew, this was intense and filled with curiosity.
      Loved everything about this and you!

      • not to mention the connection with the name “Pandora”… I was going to take and use a picture of one of the small jewelry boxes here on the(your) dresser. But the one I used works too I guess.
        You know how long I messed with this write. I still see a little bit of edits… But I’m resting it. LOL
        Hey, it’s no secret where such inspiration comes from, for me to get ideas like this! What!

        Pew pew!

    • The splendor of your poem filled me as I read with a rapturous yet softly and darkly wonder. I could see Pandora with her jar and the first tentative attraction unfolding until that jar of opened and the tempests come. But after the storm there is a truth in her being that is irresistible and compelling in the utmost. I could feel this in my heart and it was a truly splendorous read.

      John

      • Much appreciated, John. That’s quite a comment! I was really torn over whether to write of the result of the opening moreso. But decided to end it the way it is. Mostly because the write became a bit too lengthy, so I felt the need to cut it like I did.
        Your comment is awesome, thank you!

        -Mark

    • Thank you very much, Bat. This one took quite a bit of work!
      How’s Gotham? 😉

    • Well what a hell of a comment, Brenda. Thanks for that. I’m trying to find subjects a bit unordinary. This one was a leap!

    • I am doing well, Damian. A recent trip to Texas (to see Del) was awesome.
      Thank you for the supportive comment, too. This one took quite a bit of work, and hacking up the lines, for days. I’m trying to be interesting for the reader/s, so any encouraging words go a long way. Thank you.

    • Absolutely tremendous. Powerful work.

      • Thank you much, Thomas. I did some homework and then several hacks at it before I considered it worth posting. I guess I’m trying to step out of my comfort writes and take on things that are interesting enough to push myself with.

    • There’s a feeling in the way you spread this that almost quivers with anticipation and eagerness. Masterfully written! Pandora is a source of much intrigue and this is an incredible twist on the story. Those last few lines were the perfect punctuation. I’m a bit in awe here

      • Hey Willow! Wow thanks for the boost!
        I went back and forth on how to end this one. Do I take it more critical of the results? Or, let it play out without graphic detail, since we all know the story. And I wanted it kept at the human level, but not too obviously the physical aspect needing to be spelled out. Let the reader build their own imagery, right?
        I really appreciate your enthusiastic reply. It’s good to know when our efforts pay off, so thank you.

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