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Read Moresweet fuckin chaoshittin in sugar rush style heart skippinsprintin draggin me by the throatthru every goddamn beat I’m buzzinwiredburstin at the seamsevery thought wearin angel wingstellin mecome on let’s flylike they’ve forgottenhow fast I crater holy shitholy hellholy breakageholy mother fuckin...
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appreciate it
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Holy shit, this was a match that lit a keg of dynamite.
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damn. thanks
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“I’m paces ahead of myself
jaw tight
brain flickerin
wantin shit I can’t hold
and tryin to stop reachin for it.”Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent write my friend. I can relate, the verse above resonates with me deeply. Probably because I’m a person who paces rather it be literally or in the mind when dealing with things. Sometimes I do both at the same time. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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right there with ya on both at same time. appreciate it.
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Read MoreEach confession a breadcrumb Haven’t got all the answers yet Same pattern a different drum Raw silence equals heavy debt Numbers change for a price Depending on if you play along Trusting no one is sound advice Said some old forgotten song Explain the fundamental illusion That leads...
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Oh, this is good, Damian.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Adagio. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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There’s a song in there somewhere.Obviously in a minor key.
Great write🤘
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Peter. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Usually in a minor key for sure. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I would be bored with the norm as well. This is good Damian
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Powerful writing, my friend.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Thomas. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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First this can be both a poem and a song, it has the beat of a song. Second, You said in your note that instead of thinking wiser You rolled with it, but truth to be said your poem from first line to the final is all wisdom. For me this is a monologue with the inner self to make sense of what is not sense, To be aware of everything that happened and what is needed to be changed, the “had enough” and welling to breaking the patten of the same repeation is felt in the final verse, your poems always has a personal feeling and that make them special.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Light. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I think it works either way myself. I must say I always enjoy your commentary and opinions, you’re pretty much on point with where I was going with this one. There are always pieces of me in my writes my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Oh damn, that last verse hit hard. After each of the other verses, it became a hammer of defiance. I’m not sure I believe in a norm. It always just strikes me as others expecting you to be more like them. Meet them at their level because they’re too lazy to move. To evolve. No thank you. This is another strong piece. And I think just rolling with it worked out beautifully, my friend
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I don’t know that I believe in the norm either, I agree it’s like living up to the standard of others, funny thing is that they can’t live up to it themselves. But hypocrites love to snipe at others. So glad I rolled with it as well. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Nice.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Amethyste. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Powerful work, my friend. Vivid and sharp.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Thomas. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Damian when the illusions melt away and the masks are gone there is a great since of liberation as well as sadness. Not fitting in can make one feel alone but at the same time emancipated from a lifetime of being a square peg in a round hole. Truly great poetry here, my friend. You have given me the reader a glimpse into a life that is honest to oneself. I am most enriched to have read this.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, John. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I’ve learned over time that the honest approach can be the most open to be heard. Thank you so much for your support. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Secret Ride (magic of Poetic Voice)
He came at night,
On a wind of heat.
A bead of sweat,
On lips so sweet.
“Come with me”
He whispered close.
They are all asleep,
Said, my sexy host.
I crawled out of bed.
On crumpled sheets.
A teddy that cling,
To my heat.
Just be quiet.
It will be fun.
No one will know,
Not even one.
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Ahhh, Fia
I so love and enjoy the fun of how you’ve used your amazingly gifted poetic voice to blend the vibrant colors, hues, and textures of your deliciously delightful diction to paint word pictures into our joy-filled imaginations, in such ways it all comes to life.
Your short lines build a quick cadence, and with spot-on line-bnreaks, r…Read More
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Thank you 😊
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Beautifully penned, Fia. Appreciate you, cuz.
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Thank you Damian
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Read MoreAmongst the silver drops of rainI heard the silent water hissInvited with a hazy holdAnd a pull of a longing kiss. Wrinkled layers she then removedHeavy onto the floor they landKneeling down onto her two kneesMy pole she squeezed in...
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Well…well. what kind of shower is this?
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the kind you go out dirtier then you come into
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Omg. Love it
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Oh my…..gives a whole new meaning to a ‘shower head’.
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Thanks Peter… every shower should have a head
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Pluming?! I didn’t know this is what they call that … live and learn
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twofiftythree wrote a new post
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Read Morethere’s a momentright after the breakwhere sound hangswith its breath heldsuspended in the roomevery surface waitin to see if I rise or rupture my chest burns thinlungs made of paper pulse misfirin thru my wrists in broken rhythmand I keep...
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Man the end sounds like “The End”.
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Brilliantly penned, 253. You’re killing it brother, some pieces never truly return from the performance, sacrificial lambs to feed the beast, possibly? Excellent storytelling my friend, dig the layers, they seem to wake up thoughts in my head. Great series. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Well, fuck it! I like it.