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I admire the ease with which you express your inner world. Stoic, melancholy, honest and beautiful write. You are there in every word, thank you for the share!
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Okay, that is gut-wrenching. To lay there and live a slow death that you did not sign up for. Not right at all.
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Thanks for the thoughtful comment Fia.
It’s not right and it’s not wrong , it’s just the way it is.Like everything in life,even suffering is impermanent.
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Quite moving..thank you for sharing
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I’ve often felt that pain is preferable to apathy. That quiet passing out of space. This haunts & hurts. So often the case, & always hard
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First the Technical: Excellent consistency with meter, beautifully executed rhyme.
Composition: Incredible depth. As Willow noted, the piece reflects a falling away, a loss of touch and intimacy with no explanation. It’s a death of sorts, and you’ve painted it perfectly. Really well done.
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Read MoreI am on fucking firefrom the top of my head to the bottom of my feetThe fire started from withinBlood drips from every openingSizzling the moment, it hits outer skinI want to cryBut I can notI screamed so loudyou...
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Great write Fia.
I think we’d agree we aren’t our bodies.
Somewhere in the spaces between our cells , our atoms, is our consciousness…but that’s not us either.
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Thank you, Peter that is a profound statement. I believe we are more.
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Phenomenally penned, Fia. This was a powerful write my friend, I think our soul is our mind. It makes sense to me anyways. Appreciate you.
Damian
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That is definitely a thought. Thank you Damian
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The Heart & Soul is everything to a person’s existence. The brain is just there to put it into words. Great piece Fia. xo
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Thank you, Keith 😊
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Read MoreDon and I have become friends.and we make quite the odd pair.Just an unruly girl and a bottle;Drinking myself silly,the way I cling to himyou’d think it’s an affair. Don only gets the worst of me but he makes...
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I hope you didn’t drink the entire bottle.
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Never.. it can get quite pricey.
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Beautifully penned, P.G. Love the flow and wordplay my friend. Used to like Tequila, even better was Mezcal. Of course those days are long gone, I wasn’t able to do moderation very well. Anyways a great write. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Cool piece P.G..Creative. Just don’t overdo it with the hard stuff! And I don’t mean Don’s member!! xxxo
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There is so much to unpack here: the not-quite-healthy relationship that just feels so good, too good. The conflicting knowledge that you seem all too aware of: /My head is telling me to drink more, my liver screams “GET IT TOGETHER!”/ Been there, done that too many times. Vodka was my liquor of choice, and Stoli was my dear friend (along with Camels) for a good while many years ago. The fact that the knowledge is there speaks volumes to you as a person. Excellent write! <3 Echo
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Introspective write, Daniel. Very powerful spill my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian