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No, they did not know each other. And what happens next is … well, what? That’s up to the reader to determine.
This was originally written as a short stage play, and a friend and I performed it at Chicago House in Austin, Texas, my home. We sat on stools in the dark, dressed in black, and each stood and played our parts directly to the audience in a tight spotlight that came down as we rose, in turn, from our stools, then returned to them, again in blackness, at the end of each speech. At the end, when we “turned the knob” of her door, we faced each other for a moment, then BLACKOUT. Each time we performed this, the audience was struck dumb, but eventually broke out in applause, seeming to get permission to applaud from the first few brave souls who started it. It was sweet.
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Aww
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Read More© 1990Personal PollBy FlatDaddyThere are opinion polls for this and that;There's the Harris Poll and the Gallup Poll, the Neilson Ratings (which is a poll in drag),There are supermarket polls where they wanna know which container of syrup and...
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Great write….hope you get what you want.
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Thank you so much; and yes, I’ve received much more than I deserve — we’ve been married for more than 33 years now!
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Hey, Peter, I added a picture to this. Take a look!
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Beautifully penned, Fia. Incredible write my friend, really like this a lot. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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![Profile picture of Fia Naturie]()
Thank you Damian 😊
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![Profile picture of Kelly Scheppers]()
It’s a beautiful thing when minds sync on one purpose. Your closing line couldn’t define it better!
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![Profile picture of Fia Naturie]()
Thank you, Kelly;))
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![Profile picture of Styxian]()
Sweetly sung as whispers. A hint of seductive word play without being graphic. I like the subtlety. Leave the reader to build their own visions as they read. Well crafted Fia.
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![Profile picture of Fia Naturie]()
Thank you, you know I can be “in your face” with the graphics. But I can tone it down as well.;))
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Thank you, Hj xx
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![Profile picture of Tim]()
Nicely done, Fia. Your romantic side is showing. 🙂
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(giggling) I can be romantic. Thank you, Tim;))
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🙂 I’ll bet you can.
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I am keeping all this romance together.;))
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![Profile picture of Thomas W. Case]()
Superb and sensual. Excellent.
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Thank you, Thomas;))
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![Profile picture of FlatDaddy]()
Nicely done, Fia, but it seems to need just a bit of punctuation to help with the flow, I wasn’t sure at first how to read it, stopping after each line, then going, “Oh, I see it now.” Nice work.
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Thank you, FlatDaddy;))
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You can beat an egg and a drum and a carpet .. and a few other things besides .. but you just can’t beat a bit of sync now can ya eh’ .. Very much enjoyed the ride Fia .. Neville 😎👍
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Thank you, Neville;))
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Hold on we have to go back to the beginning, we will return on your tightness
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Thank you, Me;))
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![Profile picture of goldenmyst]()
Fia, this read like an erotic encounter of a bewitchingly soft yet libidinal ambrosia. There is magic here that takes me into the heart of the poem. I could feel the silken sheets and that last line has to be the most original and brilliant ending “liquid ambrosia”.
John
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I wanted it be soft. Thank you
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Read More© 1990Ode to Blue-Haired LadiesBy FlatDaddy They drive battleships down Mopacat eighty miles per hour,Peeping through the window of the wheel,Hands at ten and two above their heads. Next to them,I see blue birds' nests and noses,spectacles perched atop their beatific...
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I saw two Blue haired ladies today. There is something about them that exudes strength…
I like your stanza about the cars they drive. “The first church of Buick”—
this is innovative in its metaphor and analogies.
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Thank you so much, Jacob. I truly do appreciate your opinions.
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![Profile picture of Crimsin]()
hello dearest Daddy I’ve known these ladies they say is Jesus is their copilot and I believe them they somehow always get home safe great write ❤️
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Thank you so much, Crimsin. Yes, they always manage, don’t they? One day, they might all meet on the same road and we’ll have a pileup of angelic proportions, hubcaps and plastic virgins flying everywhere!
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I wanted to say something before I end the read. My initial take on the story is that it is sweet. I appreciate the two colors to keep people engaged with who is speaking. I will finish it and write the rest of this comment.
Oh my.. So they knew each other? She wanted him but was scared; he wanted her but was scared. Seems to go well with what is happening with young people who only talk online. Now, creeping into her place is taking it to another level.
Hopefully it ends well for both of them