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Read Moresunny side up babyscrambled heart on the sideburnt edgesoverdone centerbits of me stickin to the panand I drop it in front of youwatchin youwaitinfor you to choke downevery fucked up bite the rest of me’s still on the stovesmokinpoppin greasewhole...
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I like the way this is relatable in sense that you can see this happening between two people who are not seeing eye to eye on things.
Favorite line “Presentation’s everythin”
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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
bi-trillets attempt. this one wasn’t easy for me…never do well when rhymin is involved.
endless night confession
breathe in the black smoke, love feels like a joke
the nights we wasted tasted strange
cheap liquor kiss, dirty exchangeyou were my worst itch, struck like a kill switch
old barroom lungs in borrowed light
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A brilliant submittal, Syr Dru
Congratulations on another successfully excellent effort in displaying such admirable skill in the true essence and grasp of that which is conveyed in these earnestly shared teaching sessions.
Your poetic potential is second to none … this piece is spot-on in every sense of the phrase: meter, poetic voice, i…Read More
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I wonder if we are readin the same poem. I really expected this one to get marked up with a red pen on all the places I went wrong. I appreciate your input and the lessons you’re providin. I’ll agree with you on fixin the rhyme so I’ll add the s to pain. but you’re gonna have to pry my lowercase letters and lack of punctuation from my cold dead ha…Read More
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Ha-hahhhh!
That’s a given, M’Friend, but I’ll never give-up on ya. 🤓
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Read Moresweet fuckin chaoshittin in sugar rush style heart skippinsprintin draggin me by the throatthru every goddamn beat I’m buzzinwiredburstin at the seamsevery thought wearin angel wingstellin mecome on let’s flylike they’ve forgottenhow fast I crater holy shitholy hellholy breakageholy mother fuckin...
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Well, fuck it! I like it.
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appreciate it
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Holy shit, this was a match that lit a keg of dynamite.
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damn. thanks
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“I’m paces ahead of myself
jaw tight
brain flickerin
wantin shit I can’t hold
and tryin to stop reachin for it.”Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent write my friend. I can relate, the verse above resonates with me deeply. Probably because I’m a person who paces rather it be literally or in the mind when dealing with things. Sometimes I do both at the same time. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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right there with ya on both at same time. appreciate it.
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Read Morethere’s a momentright after the breakwhere sound hangswith its breath heldsuspended in the roomevery surface waitin to see if I rise or rupture my chest burns thinlungs made of paper pulse misfirin thru my wrists in broken rhythmand I keep...
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Man the end sounds like “The End”.
You bring me into your world of music and I have to say wow. Well done -
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Brilliantly penned, 253. You’re killing it brother, some pieces never truly return from the performance, sacrificial lambs to feed the beast, possibly? Excellent storytelling my friend, dig the layers, they seem to wake up thoughts in my head. Great series. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read Morethe tempo liftsshy at firstbut hunger cracks thrua wingbeat mistimedthen anotherand suddenly I’m breathin wrongtoo quicktoo muchoxygen volatile in my chest notes climb without grace right hand runninchasin ghosts up the scaleleft hand anchorin low a heartbeat gnashin its teeth color floods the...
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A choice has to be made, a step must be taken. Enjoying the series
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Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent write my friend. Sounds like falling in quicksand at first, then embracing the fear and just going for it, improvising all the possible outcomes while dodging the bullets wizzing by. Loving this series, all your lines are precise laying out the story and working in unison. Hell Yeah. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent write my friend. Kinda of a cannibal Iron Chef vibe. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian