Great song
Great write
So many amazing lines

Fav
unmake me
remake me
break me

until i shine

YOU always shine in my eyes

BIG LIKE

KX AWARD

Passionately penned, Kristina. A clever write, with a touch of kink my friend. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

Ahh, you definitely get it.
There’s something unspeakably powerful about being taken apart… only to be rebuilt again, piece by trembling piece, more radiant (or darker) than before.

It’s so good to see you, too.
Kindred souls always seem to find each other in the smoke and ashes… and maybe, just maybe, we’re the ones who know how to rebuild with a little more fire in our touch.

Thank you for feeling this with me.
Let’s keep shining through the ruin, yeah?

🔥💋

Too many ropes, and leashes
But no bra..

A poem that reads like too many hands touching, feeling your body at once!

Lovely, pure seduction cascading down the page, hanging on to every word, wanting and waiting for more.
Great stuff Kristina.

This is scintillatingly sensually alive that grabs me where the sun don’t shine and holds me there as I writhe under your spell. Truly you put the iron to the fire here my friend. And I am seduced by you.

John

Love the sheer erotic narrative here that draws me in and makes me want to stay until the very end. Truly a hot poem that inspired bedroom thoughts and feelings. I could feel this deep down where the sun doesn’t shine.

John

Passionately penned, Fia. You always make the temperature hotter with your writes my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

” They start with that whisper that hits behind the ear

A practiced tone

That causes goose bumps and raises those baby hairs ”

Yeahhh…this paints a pic of some nice memories.

Nicely written

Naaj

I’ve always been accused of being a grown man… now you know why… this was a great story.. perfectly done…love it.

Superb

Love your spacing… very effective emphasis. Second person narrative is such a powerful literary POV, and you’ve taken full advantage. The conversational tone reflects the overwhelming effort to maintain control. The piece is as much about self as it is situational management, and I think the limited information provided makes it all the more relatable.

Thank you, Wil;))l

Powerfully penned, Fia. There is venom in those words my friend. Incredible write. Appreciate you.

Damian

Heavy! Like this a lot.

This is incredibly raw and honest. The way you describe the tears as rage, not sorrow, feels so real. Thank you for sharing this.

Cleverly penned, Blue. Great write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Go back and edit at the last two lines. There’s a space in the word “shoe”.

We always wonder if past lovers think about us… it’s a natural thing. Particularly at the grocery. And for all you guys out there that fucked me… yes, I remember you – particularly in produce when I’m looking through the cucumbers.

Seriously, Blue – I can relate. Now put your shoes in the dryer and go back for that check out boy.

The metaphor of the shoe in the washing machine certainly heightens the auditory senses in the overall underlying anxiousness.
Great work Blue.