This is so sad, and I can feel how much he misses her. Even the everyday mundane things stray to thoughts of her. Very good story,

Well, now, this is just a butt-kicker. You set the scene brilliantly, then proceed to serve up dose after dose of sadness. I feel this poor guy’s pain, and want to buy him a beer or something. I didn’t know you had this kind of writing in you. Hopefully, there’s more.

Deep resonance of emotions here. Compelling literature that captures a night at the laundromat that is anything but ordinary. Original captivating and powerfully rendered. Your attention to detail of the scene and the character emotional response to the event unfolding before him is as touchingly developed as it is strong. Truly gifted prose writing.

John

This is good. Why would it be the only story you write ?

Powerfully penned, Tim. I wouldn’t give up on storytelling my friend, this is a really good story. I liked this a lot, If I’m ever in the neighborhood, we’ll take a walk. lol. Appreciate you.

Damian

Powerful work. Great storytelling.

Don’t listen to nay sayers Tim
I did that with my art stuff
Listened to the wrong people tell me my stuff wasn’t any good
Then I stopped listening and said to myself
I’m doing this for me
Fuck everyone else

Keep writing stories Tim

BIG LIKE

I enjoyed this. I grew up with trains and hobos, so the subject is something I find very interesting. You say you’ve just started writing short stories and in my book, you’re off to a bang up start. Also, your writing is lean and correct–just the way it should be.

Powerful work. Excellent.

Time this is engaging prose that took me into the scene. You write excellent accounts and I for one am a big fan of your writing here. Truly hauntingly powerful. Starts off like an ordinary day and then full of surprises.

John

Cleverly penned, Tim. Oh, the life of a writer. Reading this was like Deja Vu my friend. Amazing work. Appreciate you.

Damian

Nice! “Because”, is the perfect answer to why we write poetry. So many possibilities, reasons, inspirations behind that magical word. I agree with Damian. Very clever write, my friend.

Amen brother!
This is a testament for us all. Written elequently enough for us to relate to.