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Read MoreThe dawn was new, the day was fresh Life filled with endless possibilities The sun had lit a path of successUntil temptation overshadowed susceptibilities This storm was brewing with humility An internal chaos hidden and unknownColliding rising temps of instability Boiling before the stones...
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Thank you..tried writing a poem with layered multiple meanings.. didn’t quite come out as I 1st envisioned but sometimes you have 2 go where rm the words take you
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Read MoreIn my mind's subconscious There was a peaceful calmness Then life's reality crept upon us Dark thoughts haunting and ominous The horizon once clear and endless But loved one's deaths left me senseless From this heartache I am defenseless Alone in this world now friendless My confused...
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Reversing evolution, Damn. This has a nice flow to it. Enjoyed this.
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Thank you..glad u enjoyed..hope all is well
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Yes, thank you
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Thats good to hear..haven’t been on here much recently..been super busy..I need to catch up on everyone’s writing
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Seductively penned, Brenda. Fantastic writing my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian thank you graciously I deeply appreciate you 💕
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You are without a doubt, the Queen of Darkness & Lust. Your pen, weaves magic and this piece is no exception. I love everything you’ve written here, you know I do.
Love you, Brenda
Your sister Jackie❤️-
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hello lovely Jackie thank you my sister for such a beautiful comment forgive my delayed response I went through a couple down days I cherish you 💕
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hello beautiful Mary yes it is this is poetic lust which is intoxicating I deeply appreciate you 💕
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Read MoreA haunting beauty you are moonlit, mortality still flowing with passion. A haunting romanticism our shared lips are, bathing together in crimson moonlight. Your kiss lingers well beyond death, and beyond our last cold moment. And there's a dominance in your kiss... Hopefully not eternal...
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And there’s a dominance in your kiss…
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I love the gothic style here.
Very powerful and I envy such a beauty…haunting.
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Powerfully penned, Daniel. An intriguing write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreYour inconsistencies are consistentHappy yet state your sadAngry but seem to be gladRelaxed but wound tightWant to be gentle yet you biteNo one understandsNo one took the timeNo one gave a shitAlways left behindWeeping from rageSpilling into the calm...
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Intriguing…
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Thank you, willow
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I like the contrast you used in some verses. Dark thoughts indeed. Well done, Fia!
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Thank you, M.E appreciate that
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Powerfully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend, with dark vibes very present. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian. was in the zone.
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Thank you, Adira;))
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Fantatic!
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Thank you, Adagio
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G’Mornin’, Fia 🌤️
Good title, and what a great lead-in with V1’s frustrating contradictions setting the mood for what’s to come (L2, make it “you’re” sad).
Boy howdy! You sure know how to express the angst so many of us have had to endure and overcome; yet, it seems some never do … sadly so.You’re such a creative writer, Ria: I admire your keen ability to weave vivid imagery and emotion throughout every verse and in the use of spot-on rhymes, timely line-breaks, and smooth flow.
Excellent wrap-up verse, too. For rhyme’s sake with “despair,” consider using “there” rather than “here” (just a thought).“Wake, wake from this despair! (great poe-esque touch)
It is me you’re talking to …
no one else is there.”Fia, you’re such a joy to read and share with. 🌈
Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌-
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Thank you so much for the compliment and comment. Richard I appreciate it
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Oh, sure thing, Fia!
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Yes, it has been changed. Ty ;))
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You misunderstood, Fia … I meant to change L4 to “there”. Not L2, which was fine as “despair”.
So “despair” and “there” rhyme.
(like this)
Still, you find me in your dreams
Wake, wake from this despair
It is me you’re talking to
No one else is there.
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Very captivating.
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Thank you, CasketSharpe;))
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Thank you, Steven;))
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