Your inconsistencies are consistent
Happy yet state your sad
Angry but seem to be glad
Relaxed but wound tight
Want to be gentle yet you bite
No one understands
No one took the time
No one gave a shit
Always left behind
Weeping from rage
Spilling into the calm sight
Words flow and cascade
Every word fit just right
You don’t know me
You created an illusion in your mind
I lured you in, temped you
Like a juicy grape on a vine
I am the skull and crossbones on a black bottle
I am the one to be weary of
Not one to be held and coddled
Not a newborn, don’t need your love
I caused the pain
I revel in your screams
I maybe going insane
Still, you find me in your dreams
Wake, wake from this despair
It is me you’re talking to
No one else is there.
Intriguing…
Thank you, willow
I like the contrast you used in some verses. Dark thoughts indeed. Well done, Fia!
Thank you, M.E appreciate that
Powerfully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend, with dark vibes very present. Appreciate you.
Damian
Thank you, Damian. was in the zone.
Nice spill, Fia
Thank you, Adira;))
My pleasure🌺
Fantatic!
Thank you, Adagio
G’Mornin’, Fia 🌤️
Good title, and what a great lead-in with V1’s frustrating contradictions setting the mood for what’s to come (L2, make it “you’re” sad).
Boy howdy! You sure know how to express the angst so many of us have had to endure and overcome; yet, it seems some never do … sadly so.
You’re such a creative writer, Ria: I admire your keen ability to weave vivid imagery and emotion throughout every verse and in the use of spot-on rhymes, timely line-breaks, and smooth flow.
Excellent wrap-up verse, too. For rhyme’s sake with “despair,” consider using “there” rather than “here” (just a thought).
“Wake, wake from this despair! (great poe-esque touch)
It is me you’re talking to …
no one else is there.”
Fia, you’re such a joy to read and share with. 🌈
Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌
Thank you so much for the compliment and comment. Richard I appreciate it
Oh, sure thing, Fia!
Did you notice the edit suggestions?
Yes, it has been changed. Ty ;))
You misunderstood, Fia … I meant to change L4 to “there”. Not L2, which was fine as “despair”.
So “despair” and “there” rhyme.
(like this)
Still, you find me in your dreams
Wake, wake from this despair
It is me you’re talking to
No one else is there.
Very captivating.
Thank you, CasketSharpe;))
Your volcano can sweep away any stone-hearted man, any colossal barrier in its way;
Your strong emotions Fia are felt deeply here, from a poets sharp sensitivity….Great Lines
Thank you, Steven;))
Warm welcome from Hamid.